(Closed) Am I missing anything? Critique my wording

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
298 posts
Helper bee

I’d write out the date and time. Other than that, they look great!


The honor of your presence
is requested at the marriage of




on Saturday, the twenty eighth of June
two thousand fourteen
at five o’clock in the evening 

Post # 4
1254 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: April 2014

@Chrysoberyl:  I agree with PP – either write out the date or put 2014 on the same line as June 28th 🙂 Other than that looks good 🙂

Post # 6
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

It should be Saturday, June 28, 2014.  No th at thend.  

Post # 7
298 posts
Helper bee

@Chrysoberyl:  Not everyone says twenty fourteen. I don’t. I personally think it looks terrible to not have the date and times written out. I worked at a print shop and sold wedding invitations for six years. It’s never done this way. But it’s your invitation 🙂

Post # 8
5902 posts
Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: October 2010

The text font is a little small.

Post # 9
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

You would also write 5:00 p.m. or five o’clock in the evening.

Post # 10
13431 posts
Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2011

@Chrysoberyl:  They’re beautiful!

I’d use a comma, but no “th” after 28.

For the time, if you aren’t writing out the date, I don’t think you’d want to write out “five” either, but the single numeral looks a little lonely to me. What about “5:00”? Up to you of course!

And haha, I think in my area/circles it’s a pretty even split between “twenty-fourteen” and “two thousand fourteen.” I don’t think either is inherently wrong, so again, up to you. 🙂

Post # 11
1274 posts
Bumble bee

Is the reception at the same location? Or is there a reception card you are including? 

I echo other posters that mentioned writing out the date and time and I would add “On” to the date line as that area looks a little sparse in wordage.  

EDIT: I forgot to say I think they are really pretty invites! 🙂 



Post # 12
26 posts

@Chrysoberyl:  I think everyone gave good points, but it the wording depends on how formal you want it to be. If you are going for less formal then I would simply format it this way:


Saturday, June 28, 2014

Five in the evening


This way the lines itself will “appear” to be even or aligned even though its not equal in line length.

Other than that I think your invites are beautiful! 🙂

Post # 13
3797 posts
Honey bee
  • Wedding: October 2015

If you’re looking for it to be grammatically correct, it should look something like:

Saturday, June 28, 2014

Those telling you to spell out the year are most likely doing so under the guise of a “formal” invitation/wedding. If you do not want it to be formal, then have the numbers in numerical fashion. However, five should be spelled out regardless. Technically, any number under ten should be written out, unless it is in a date. I think it would look much better if it read something like “five o’clock in the evening.” 

Aesthetically, the fonts look like they could be just a little bigger to maximize some of the blank space on the card. 

Post # 16
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

I think it should be consistent.  If you’re writing it out, it should read:


Saturday, the twenty-eigth of June


Two thousand fourteen


Five o’clock in the evening




Otherwise it should be all numbers:


Saturday, June 28, 2014


5:00 p.m.


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