Are these better? Friendly critiques please!!!

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 4
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2013 - rolling hills of southern italy

Those look nice. I would re-read that wishing well bit. The wording is really awkward, stumbling all over yourself.

i like the simple map. nice work…

Post # 6
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2013 - rolling hills of southern italy

I went back and read the origional. Yes, this is a bit better.. But the awkward wording had nothing to do with what is being said. It’s the fact that the word wish is overused, and “if” clauses come before AND after the mention of the wishing well. 

 

 

 

I don’t know that I would print this on an invitation. People will likely ask you about registries and such, and you can spread the word that way. they will see the wishing well. listing even a registry on an invitation seems a bit pushy to me. But this is your choice, and I know Aussie brides say it’s accepted there. 

 

ETA: realized I didn’t include a suggestion. I don’t want to change your style much though…

 

Keeping with your style: 

 

“All we ask is that you share our special day with us.  No gifts are needed, but a wishing well will be available for those who would like to help fulfill our dream of purchasing a home.”

 

Post # 8
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: July 2013

@BabyBrain:  My thing is that the cursive writting with the address and date are difficult to read.

IMO I would keep the simple text for that and fluffy text for things like names etc.

check this site out to maybe look through new fonts, you can find one that is still fancy without being difficult.

http://www.1001freefonts.com/

 

Post # 9
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: August 2013

I think they look good, but Reception shouldn’t be capitalized in the wishing well one.  🙂

Post # 10
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2001

The only thing I would do is move in the “together with our families” because the printer could cut it off and it is much farther than the line under your names. but looks great centered.

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