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    Swoontobee Mrs.G    November 5, 2011   OC, CA

    Hello! I could really use a fresh pair of eyes! Could one of you lovely ladies please double check the following for typos, grammar errors, weird wording, etc? Any suggestions needed, I'm printing them out tomorrow morning (Saturday).

    Also, do the fonts (Albermarle Swash and Georgia) look bad together? I know nothing about fonts!

    THANKS SO VERY MUCH in advance.

    EDIT: Weddingbee keeps making my spacing wonky between our names in the invite and the sentences in the reception card. Please ignore it, it doesn't actually look like that.

    [Invitation:] 

    Mr. and Mrs. John Smith

    request the honor of your presence

    at the marriage of their daughter

    Jane Smith 

     to 

    Jack Robert Brown,

    son of Mr. and Mrs. Peter Brown

    Saturday, the fifth of November

    two thousand eleven

    at four o'clock in the afternoon

    [location name]

    [location street address]

    [city, state]

     

    [Reception card:]

    Eat, drink, and be married!

    Please celebrate with us at a reception immediately following the ceremony, also to be held at [location name].  

    For directions, accommodation information, and full wedding details please visit our website at:

    www.weddingwire.com/JillandJack

    password: The Browns

     

     

    [RSVP:]

    We do! Do you? 

     Kindly respond before September 30th, 2011

     We have reserved ____ seat(s) in your honor. 

           ❏ Accept with pleasure

                     ____ out of _____ will attend.  

                    Name(s) of those attending: ___________________________

                    ______________________________________________

                                   *If vegetarian plate is desired, please indicated next to name. 

            ❏ Decline with regret

     
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    Swoontobee Mrs.G    November 5, 2011   OC, CA

    EDIT: Weddingbee keeps making my spacing wonky between our names in the invite and the sentences in the reception card. Please ignore it, it doesn't actually look like that.

     
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    elliestan    October 15, 2011   OK | TX

    there's not a comma after "daughter" but there is after your FH's name so i say drop it from after his.

    i would also drop the word "information" after accomodation and just say "accomodations" because that's too many "ations" too me!

    aaaand... i would make it "accepts" and "declines" or even "accept(s)" "decline(s)" vs accept/decline

     
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    melodicsighs1    May 22, 2010   San Diego

    On the response card, it says "please indicated next to name" - it should say "please indicate" or "please indicate so"

     
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    Swoontobee Mrs.G    November 5, 2011   OC, CA

    Thanks so much!!!! That's really helpful! You're totally right about having too many "ations." I didn't even notice that! The reason why I worded it that way is because I thought that writing just "accommodations" would sound like I am providing the actual accommodations, instead of just info on them, but no one would think that right?

     
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    Swoontobee Mrs.G    November 5, 2011   OC, CA

    @melodicsighs1: thanks so much!!

     

     
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    melodicsighs1    May 22, 2010   San Diego

    @Swoontobee Mrs.G: If you're worried about people thinking you're providing accomodations, you can say "for information regarding accomodations, directions, and full wedding details..." so that the "ation"s aren't right next to each other. I think saying "for directions, accomodations, and full wedding details..." is just fine too, though.

     
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    airythia    January 15, 2011   Dayton

    Rather than "at the marriage of their daughter," I think it should be "for the marriage of their daughter."  But that's nothing major and may in fact, be a preference thing.

    For the reception card, I would drop the comma in the first sentence and the word "also" (unless it is held at the same location as the ceremony then it's no big but still no comma).  "Please celebrate with us at a reception immediately following the ceremony also to be held at [location name]."

    Personally, I think just having the word accommodations sounds weird especially since you are providing information on accommodations (like you though).  Maybe change it to "For directions, hotel information, and full wedding details" instead.

     
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    shanly725    July 20, 2012  

    if you havent already printed them i would suggest a change on the rsvp cards. you only have a space for names if theyre attending. but if someone declines they will likely not write their name and you might not know who it is. i would just have a space for the names before the choice of accept or decline.

     

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