Critique my DIY invite!

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2014

i like it. i think it’s a cute idea.

however, traditionally the bride’s name goes first on an invitation.

Post # 5
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2013

I LOVE YOUR INVITES!!! =)

Post # 6
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Helper bee

I like the invites. My only criticism is that I hate seeing years written out as words rather than numbers. It’s just about okay in the top part where it kind of fits with the ott fairytale-esque flounciness, but in the informational part I hate it. Writing the year out in full isn’t a thing anyone does, so it just looks wrong and a bit silly imo.

Might just be a personal quirk, but it’s the only critique I have.

Post # 7
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: July 2013

@Fanciful:  I don’t think it has anything to do with who is paying. I would still have bride’s name first. It’s part of the formality of the invitation.

They’re lovely.

Post # 8
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: April 2014

@Fanciful:  I love the wording. I agree with pp’s your name should be first. It’s a lovely invite, if I were your guest I’d love to receive that in the post. Another idea/suggestion would be to have a wax seal on the envelope. 

Post # 9
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Newbee
  • Wedding: June 2014

It’s so cute!  The only thing I don’t really like the different colors with the fonts.  I understand it’s meant to draw attention to certain aspects of the invite, but it bothers me a bit.  Not sure why.  But if you like it, go for it!  It’s a very cute idea!

Post # 10
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: June 2013

I love it!! I adore your fairy tale font!

I agree that the other font looks a little boring. What about something like this: http://www.dafont.com/aubrey.font?text=are+joined+in+holy+matrimony&psize=s&back=theme

http://www.dafont.com/simple-print.font?fpp=50&psize=s&text=are+joined+in+holy+matrimony

I don’t think you want anything that looks too fancy or else it will take away from the other font.

I think a border would look really nice. That or you need to add some kind of graphic. Maybe a couple butterflies or birds could be “sitting” on one of the letters? Or you could have a graphic of a tree along the left side.

I also don’t like the alignment of the first few lines. Can you make the first paragraph “justify” and then the “their families request…” line centered, and then also center the “are joined in holy matriomy”? Visually it looks a little funny to me right now. 

Post # 12
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: March 2014

I was a proofreader by trade for five years, and the fact that there aren’t at least two commas in the first two lines is kind of making my eye twitch.

If I was designing this, I’d format it as:

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, a boy met a girl. They fell in love, and have been inseparable ever since.

I think the history part is neat, but that’s more something that belongs on the program and website, IMO. The invitation should be formal, lovely and brief. (But you do you. If you love it, leave it in.)

Post # 13
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: November 2010

I love the wording… but I think it should be all centered. “their families request the honour…” should be centered, as well as “are joined in holy matrimony”

 

I love the purple, and I think the font is fine. It’s readable. If you do two fancy fonts, it will look too busy. Do you like one of these for the border?

Post # 16
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2013

@EffieTrinket:  Ms. Proofreader, you missed the typo in “marriage”!

@Fanciful:  OP…. you’ve a typo in “marriage”. You’ve got it written as “marraige”. Also, “and they” after “boy met a girl” is redundant with the “They” three words later. To remove any kind of redundancy, I would suggest you change it to “a boy met a girl and the two fell in love.” Then, when you use “they” you won’t have just used it. I just feel it reads much better.

However, the comma before “and” in the first line is not needed. Two things have happened in this series of events. 1) A boy and a girl met. 2) They fell in love. A comma before “and” is ONLY needed in a series which contains three or more events. (Ex: A boy met a girl, fell in love, and got engaged.) This will remove some of the “comma diarrhea” in that first sentence.

 

 

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