Post # 1
We decided on DIY pocketfold invitations and to design the actual invitation – which has taken FOREVER. We finally came up with a design on paper and I had to design it on the computer and I am by no means a graphic designer. I finally came up with the invitation design and wording and would LOVE your honest feedback!! The invitations will be printed on white pearlescent paper with a black mat and the actual pocketfold will be purple. TIA!
This topic was modified 2 years, 11 months ago by BlueRC.
This topic was modified 2 years, 11 months ago by BlueRC.
Post # 2
Hi. Ok you asked for HONEST opinions right?
I think the design on the left is very busy, it takes up a lot of the card, its distracting and not very feminine or “elegant” In fact it looks a little asian to me, not sure if that is what you are going for?
The font looks a little “kids birthday party” and casual to me? Is this a formal event? If so I would suggest a different font.
Techinally, grammer wise, there should be a comma after drinks. I would suggest changing “drinks” to “cocktails”. It’s a bit more “grown up”. You have “drinks” at the bar after work or at happy hour, you have “cocktails” at a formal event.
Congrats to you and I hope some of this was useful to you.
Post # 3
I think it would look nicer in all script and I find the teal/blue a bit distracting. Maybe a lighter purple for the 3rd color?
Post # 4
I think it’s a great attempt but I agree with the above poster that the design is a bit busy. It reminds me of hair with split ends. Maybe make it a little more delicate by making the big purple lines thinner so they don’t stand out so much. The font seems OK if you’re having a very casual wedding. I love the wording but agree that “cocktails” sounds more wedding-appropriate (unless you’re having a very casual wedding). I don’t mean to offend in anyway. Just being honest and hopefully helpful! Congrats!
Post # 5
I honestly love the teal and purple swirls. I do agree its a little distracting. It grabs your attention first. What about making it smaller or elongate it and print one on each side? I agree on the same font as well.
Post # 6
I would try some different fonts for your names. If your fiance is John Doe III, that font makes the “I”s look like L’s or something weird.
Post # 7
yellow7404: Techinally, grammer wise, there should be a comma after drinks.
That is the pot calling the kettle black. Too funny.
Post # 8
- Wedding: June 2014 - Gold Hill Gardens
I disagree with many of the previous posters – I don’t mind the swirls. I definitely think that the invitation will be too hard to read if all of the text is in script, but I don’t love the font you’ve chosen. We are using a sans-serif font, and so that’s influencing me, I’m sure – but perhaps try a different font? Also, you don’t need to use periods at the end of any of the statements (that’s what the person doing my editing at Wedding Paper Divas told me). I think that the “day” in the “Friday, the fifteenth day of May” is a bit excessive. I’d leave it out, and take out the comma after Friday. As I read your text the first time, I thought: “Hey, I really like the first line of their invitation! That sounds A LOT like ours!” Well, it’s the same 🙂 We took out the “support our love” part of the wording because it just seemed . . . kinda weird to us. And I am a fan of the Oxford Comma, which is what everyone is talking about in your last bit. There is a lot of disagreement about whether or not to use that last comma, and I am firmly in the camp that it clarifies. I like the alliteration of “dinner, drinks, and dancing” – which puts me in the minority here. Anyway, I hope these ideas are helpful!
Post # 9
I say if you love the scrollwork on the left then go for it! It is dominant but I don’t think it’s over powering. (I like it!) But I do agree, the font should be more formal. I’d do something more along the lines of calligraphy and use what you have for the names. Congrats!
Post # 10
I agree that the serif font is a little …. round? I’m not sure what makes it look informal. I think the swirls would look better if one of the colors were grey or just lighter and less BOOM because both colors are BOOM.
And, no, you are not required to put a comma after “drinks.” It wouldn’t be wrong to include it, but the Oxford comma is not required when we are talking about items in a series that all apply to the aforementioned celebration.
Post # 11
Grammar wise there doesn’t HAVE to be a comma after drinks, it’s actually optional. It’s an Oxford comma situation. Also I agree with others that if you like the design on the left go for it, but the font for the names could use some work and the III for your FI being the 3rd looks really off. Otherwise you are definitely headed in the right direction!
Post # 12
ecrowe1218: A for effort, but I’m really not feeling it. Sorry 🙁
Have you thought about DIY invitations with a custom stamp? I think the stamp sets are around $90 on Esty and then you would have to just get some card stock and envelopes, ect… this is one of the ones I found and I think it’s so cute:
Post # 13
You switch POV’s twice on the invitation. At the top you say “Your love and friendship have helped US become who WE are” (first person) and then you say “Together with THEIR parents” (third person) and then you switch again “invite you to share OUR love as WE…” (first person again). That’s the most glaring thing to me, but I do agree with PP’s about taking the formality of your event in to account. If this is a more casual event I like it. If you want a very formal turnout I don’t think you will get it with this invitation.
Post # 14
Do not like. It looks very homemade to me and not in a good way. Too much scroll, but I hate big designs on invites. The grammar isn’t great and I do not like the fonts. I would look at other options.
Post # 15
Two really specific comments:
- Edward’s name is jammed up in the swirls. Can you adjust the format/spacing so that his name has a little more room to breathe? And as an add-on, your name might be better to be shifted over so you don’t have allll that white space to the right of your name.
- You switched your pronouns: “Together with their parents” vs. “invite you to share our joy…” Pick one or the other. Together with our parents… invite you to share our joy OR Together with their parents… invite you to share their joy…
If invites are not near the top of your list of priorities, I think this will do. The info is there and people will come to the right place at the right time on the right day. If invites are high on your priority list and integral to setting the mood, etc., I think you might want to explore other options.