(Closed) FI doesn’t like the wording…

posted 8 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: February 2014

I think it’s very cute. Why does your FH care? It doesn’t impact him…;)

Post # 4
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Helper bee

I think it sounds great! It doesn’t sound like it’s meant to be “cohesive” – each “Will you..” is about something different, but that’s part of what makes it cute and funny!

Post # 5
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: May 2010

Yea I think it makes sense.  I think if you wanted to make it a little easier to read maybe take it out of paragraph form.

Something like this:

Will you:

  • help my find my perfect dress?
  • keep my emotions in check and my sanity intact? 
  •  talk me out of unnecessary do-it-yourself projects? 
  •  stop me from registering for products we know I will never use? 
  • make sure I leave my Bachelorette Party in one piece? 
  •  make sure I get down the aisle without tripping? 
  •  dance like a fool with me at my reception? 
  •  make sure that I have the most amazing wedding day ever?

Obviously find a cuter way to not just do a bulleted list. 

Or if you want to keep it in paragraph from, maybe find a few other ways to start the sentence other than “Will you”. 

Post # 7
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: February 2014

Maybe you could change “I promise” to “I will”?

Post # 8
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2010

I think it’s great! I think he’s just being a boy and not getting it. It’s playful and fun, I love it!

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