Post # 1
Hello my fellow bees!
I am applying for an internal posistion within my company and while drafting my cover letter I got stumped in making this sentence sound positive.
“I have not been given the opportunity to be employed in this field. “
I recieved my Bachelor’s degree in HR Management in 2009 and I wasnt able to lend a job in this field when I returned back home. So I took a job as an Adminstrative Assistant as a stepping stone to get my foot in the door. (I started here in Nov 2009).
A position has recently opened in the Learning & Development department, which is a sub-section to HR. Here is the full paragraph what I have so far (where the above sentence came from)
“Completing a summer term within the HR department of a well known law office is where my passion for this field was cultivated. It was then I realized that this is what I was meant to do. Unfortunately, I have not been given the opportunity to be employed in this field. That experience not only reinforced my interest of Human Resources, but it was the deciding factor for my degree.”
Post # 3
@Plum4getful: I would just leave that sentence out. It is never a good idea to emphasize a lack of experience in your cover letter.
I would also reverse the order in your second sentence. Stary with your “passion” as the subject of the sentence. Personally, I would also delete It was then I realized that this is what I was meant to do. It just sounds a bit hoky to me, but it’s your call.
My passion for this field was cultivated completing a summer term within the HR department of a well known law office. It was then I realized that this is what I was meant to do.That experience not only reinforced my interest “in” Human Resources, but it was the deciding factor for my degree.”
Post # 4
@julies1949: I agree, leave the sentence out completely.
Post # 5
@julies1949: Whew! Thanks Lovely!!!! Its always better to have a “second eye”
That sounds much better!
Post # 6
I second everything julies1949 said. You don’t need to point out you haven’t been given the opportunity — they will see that in your resume. You could add something about how excited you are to use the extensive training from your undergraduate degree, and that the experience you have gained as an administrative assistant has helped you understand the culture and needs of the company.