How is my wording?

posted 3 years ago in Etiquette
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Bumble bee

Tallulah_:  The most formal invitations have all numbers written out as words. Less formal invitations have the numbers written as numbers. You are mixing both together “28” and “5:30” and “Two Thousand and Fourteen” and “Two O’clock”. You need to pick one form and use it throughout. If you decide on words, then don’t capitalize “two thousand fourteen” and “two o’clock”. Don’t capitalize “twenty-eighth” or “half after five o’clock” either.

I would say simply “reception and dancing at half after five o’clock” and leave out “to follow” since it doesn’t follow very directly. Are you serving dinner? “reception and dancing” implies that you are not: “dinner and dancing” or “dinner reception and dancing” would make it clear that I need not stop at Quiznos on the way to the reception.

I am a minimalist, so I am not fond of the additional enclosures. I think adults should be able to read a map, and also be able to write “Miss Aspasia Phipps / accepts with pleasure the kind invitatio of / Miss Tallulah Underscore / to her wedding on the twenty-eighth of June” on their own personal stationery and mail it in their own personal envelope with their own personal stamp. But there is nothing wrong with what you are planning other than it not being what I would choose to do.

 

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