(Closed) Invitation Critiques Needed!!!

posted 4 years ago in Paper
  • poll: Any edits for my invitaions?
    Nope - they look great! : (1 votes)
    13 %
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  • Post # 3
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    911 posts
    Busy bee
    • Wedding: October 2013 - The Down Town Club, Philadelphia

    It’s so super cute!

    Two things: You don’t need a comma after “hope you can join us” and the “And our famiies” shouldn’t be capitalized. 

    You also don’t need a comma after friendship because you have an “and” there.

    Also, on the RSVP card, I believe it shouid read, “Please let us know which events you will be attending”

    Other than those grammar tweaks, it looks awesome!

    Post # 5
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    911 posts
    Busy bee
    • Wedding: October 2013 - The Down Town Club, Philadelphia

    @JenGirl:  Hee hee. That cartoon is awesome!

    I don’t think For or Friendship needs to capitalized. I didn’t catch that!! Embarassed

    My English teacher mom would be so ashamed of me right now!

    Post # 6
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    2326 posts
    Buzzing bee

    @JenGirl:  How about on the main invite card add ‘pm’ to 5.00?

    It’s been done somewhere else, so maybe for consistency?

    Post # 7
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    1918 posts
    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: April 2012

    The following should not be capitalized:

    “Are getting married”

    “And our families”

    “For a celebration of love, laughter”

    “Friendship, and family”

    “Dinner, dancing, merriment to follow”

    On the info card”

    “Welcome Dinner”

    “Wedding”

    “Farewell Breakfast”

     

    Post # 8
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    46 posts
    Newbee
    • Wedding: October 2013

    You should put “5:00 PM” instead of just “5:00” on the invitation.  

    Post # 11
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    805 posts
    Busy bee

    Other than what’s been pointed out by PPs: “We are so excited to visit with all our friends and family, we just couldn’t fit it all into one day!” doesn’t read elegantly to me – I’m confused as to what you’re visitng and what you’re trying to fit in. If it were me I’d write something like “We are so excited to visit Georgetown with all our friends and family, we just couldn’t fit all the celebrations into one day!”.

    Also, maybe you need a comma after ‘so’ in “So we invite you etc etc etc”.

    Sorry, am very pedantic!

    Post # 12
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    710 posts
    Busy bee

    INVITATION

    Jen __

    and

    David __

    are getting married!

    We hope you can join us
    for a celebration
    of love, laughter,
    friendship, and family.

    Sunday, September 1st, 5:00 PM

    101 Kelsie Court, Georgetown, KY

    Ceremony on the back lawn
    followed by dinner, dancing, and merriment!

    1) Don’t capitalize the beginning of each line break
    2) Exclude “and our families” because it’s redundant with “family”
    3) Include PM after the time
    4) Consider changing some of the line breaks for ease of reading

    Post # 13
    Member
    710 posts
    Busy bee

    EXTRA INFO

    Visit our website
    for additional information:

    ___.ourwedding.com

    We are so very excited to visit with
    friends and family; we simply couldn’t
    fit it all in one day!
    We invite you to join us for a
    Welcome Dinner the night before and
    Farewell Breakfast the morning after.

    Welcome Dinner
    Saturday, August 31st, 7:00 PM
    Best Western Dining Room

    Farewell Breakfast
    Monday, September 2nd, 9:30 AM
    101 Kelsie Court (Back Lawn)

    1) Consider removing “http://” from the URL for neater appearance
    2) Suggested slightly different wording and line breaks
    3) Exclude “Georgetown, KY” from event details; guests will know which city
    4) Perhaps put the event titles in bold in the bottom two blocks of text

    Post # 14
    Member
    710 posts
    Busy bee

    RSVP

    1) Maybe try “Please let us know which events you are able to attend no later than July 26th”
    2) Event titles in bold?
    3) If possible, allign “Saturday” “Sunday” and “Monday” horizontally
    4) Instead of “Coming” and “Not Coming” I’d suggest Attending and Not Attending
    5) Farewell Breakfast is not centered over the third column
    6) I’d insert a space between the “[]” and the response

     

    These are super cute invites! I’m sure they’ll come out beatifully!!

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