Invitation Help!!

posted 2 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: December 2013

Anna10-05-2014:  Congrats on getting these printed!  Must feel good to be so close to finished with invites!  🙂  Anyway, just my two cents, very nice invite but the “honor of your presence” shows up twice and seems redundant to me.  In the first “honor of your presence,” the “H” is capitalized — maybe make it lower case?  I also don’t quite care for the font of “son of,” and there might be one too many fonts (see date, time, church).  To me, so many different fonts makes it look sloppy, but that’s just one girl’s opinion!  Hope you’re having fun with these!

Post # 5
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Newbee
  • Wedding: July 2014

Too many fonts.  Pick two.  

 

Get rid of the asterisks.  No need for them.  

Post # 6
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2014

Anna, to be completely honest, they need a lot of help.

1. For starters everything is off centered because you are trying to accomodate the design at the top. I would place your words first and then add a pretty graphic.

2. You should list the entire address of the church.

3. I don’t think you need to mention “dinner and dancing to follow” since you are telling them to go to your website for more info. I presume you have reception details on your website? If so, that’s enough.

There is a LOT going on with the invite. A LOT. Simplify, center and pare down.

All of the fonts and random sizes are killing me softly…

Post # 7
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2014

Everything is off center, there are waaaaaaaay too many fonts, the graphic is kind of weird and looks like Clip-Art from Word ’95, inconsistent capitalization of random words (“Honor” at the top; “Daughter” is capitalized but not “son,” and they are in different fonts for no apparent reason?).

I would just completely get rid of the “The Honor of your presence is requested!” at the top. You repeat yourself by saying “…request the honor of your presence” after the names.

Honestly, they are a bit of a mess! I think I would scrap it and start anew, personally.

Post # 10
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2014

{Bride’s Parents}<br /> and<br /> {Groom Parents}<br /> request the honour of your presence<br /> at the marriage of<br /> {Bride First} {Bride Middle}<br /> and<br /> {Groom First} {Groom Middle}<br /> on {Monday, the twenty-ninth of June}<br /> {Two thousand and fifteen}<br /> at {one o’clock in the afternoon}<br /> {Wedding Location}<br /> {Wedding Address}<br /> {City, State}

To RSVP, please visit our website at http://www.wedding.com

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{Bride First} {Bride Middle}<br /> and<br /> {Groom First} {Groom Middle}<br /> together with their parents<br /> {Bride’s Parents}<br /> and<br /> {Groom Parents}<br /> request the honor of your presence<br /> when they exchange marriage vows<br /> and begin their new life together<br /> on {Monday, the twenty-ninth of June}<br /> {Two thousand and fifteen}<br /> at {one o’clock in the afternoon}<br /> {Wedding Location}<br /> {Wedding Address}<br /> {City, State}

 —- line breaks were not preserved but I just copied these from Invitations by Dawn…

Post # 11
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2014

Anna10-05-2014:  Just get rid of the first “honor of your presence” statement. You don’t need it. We used a similar format for our invitations.

Post # 11
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: November 1999

sorry – commented on wrong thread 🙁

  • This reply was modified 2 years, 5 months ago by  .
Post # 13
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: September 2014

There are way too many fonts, and bad ones at that.

Quite truthfully, they’re quite a mess.. Is there a possibility to work with a professional? If you can’t hire a professional, I’d at least find a template online to help you learn how to properly capitalize words and to effectively communicate the right details to people.

ETA: While the update looks a smidge better.. I’d focus on finding a font that’s not in Microsoft Office. It will help to make the invites look less like they were printed from a Word document.

  • This reply was modified 2 years, 5 months ago by  KC-2722.
Post # 14
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Bumble bee

LilRhodyGem:  I agree there’s a lot going on here. However I’m in favor of keeping the details for the church as well as the “dinner and dancing to follow” as not everyone will go to the website. 

I also agree with Shirz that there’s way too much font action happening here. 🙂 I’d go a step further and say to pick fonts without serifs as they are easier to read and look more clean.

Some other nits:

  • For you, it’s “mom and dad” then for your fiance it’s “dad and mom.” I’d pick one name order for both sets of parents to be consistent.
  • Delete the asterisks. They don’t serve a purpose and add clutter.
  • Don’t capitalize the first “W” in the web address.
  • Instead of the second “request your presence” line, consider replacing with “are getting married.”
  • This reply was modified 2 years, 5 months ago by  Xu.
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