Post # 1
FH and I are getting married in a private ceremony with a informal reception that evening. I’m having problems with invitation wording for the reception only invations. I want to use some sort of quote on the invitation but am not sure how I feel about this one. Any suggestions or changes I should make?
Once in a while,
right in the middle of an ordinary life,
love gives us a fairytale.
We, Mr Lp and Ms Lp
will be married in a private wedding ceremony
on July 3, 2010
You are joyfully invited to an
informal outdoor wedding celebration
after the wedding at 2:00
Tarpon Springs, Florida
Post # 3
I think you could make the wording a bit more clear, but I really like the quote you have! If you just off-set it a bit, so it was obviously not part of the invite text, I think it’ll look really pretty. I would change a few things about the actual inviting though
Just use your names, no “we” before them, and remove the word “wedding” from line 2 (it’s obvious). You could also think about moving the date down, after the actual inviting. “Mr & Ms will be married in a private ceremony. You are joyfully invited…. on July 3 at 2pm” Just a thought.
Post # 4
I like the quote too! I wonder if the wording “wedding celebration” doesn’t potentially imply that it’s the wedding itself that people are being invited to (where private = you and your 20 closest friends and family). If you avoid this if you just dropped “wedding”, I think, so that it just said “You are joyfully invited to an informal outdoor celebration…”
Post # 5
edited due to layout problems…
Post # 6
What if you DON’T put what they’re NOT invited to at the top and put what they ARE higher up, so you’d be leading with the lead & swapping it a bit like this:
You are joyfully invited to the wedding celebration of
on the third of July, two thousand and ten
at two o’clock in the afternoon
following their private wedding ceremony
Tarpon Spring, Florida
oh — could considering losing the second “wedding” before celebration/// I’m not crazy about inviting guests to a marraige, I mean, a marriage is a relationship!