Post # 1
So, after spending a day with Fiance trying to complete the design and wording for our invitation, I think we’re finally ready (or close to ready!) to begin printing these babies!.
I posted a little while ago about the invitation wording and whether we she keep it “our” or change the whole thing to “their”. Most of you lovely ladies liked the “their” better because it’s more traditional/formal, however, we asked FI’s Nanny and Poppy which they prefer. They liked the “our” version because it’s more personal, and there is no going against Nanny and Poppy! We played around with using a larger watermark & behind our names, but everyone we showed couldn’t tell what it was! So we made a small & and found a picture of an anchor to cover the background of our invitation as a watermark. (Our wedding is nautical theme since it’s at a yacht club).
Please please please, be 100% honest about your opinion on these. Let me know what you would change (font, punctuation, design, wording!)
Post # 3
I think your names should be centered! I noticed that right away. Also, maybe i’m wrong but When you say your full names, and then “together with our parents” should it be “together with their parents”? I again, could be totally wrong in the grammar dept.
I love the theme though, and they are cute 🙂
edit: I just read your above statement…I think I’d agree with the other Bees and change that wording…
Also you have some non proper nouns capitalized that don’t need to be.
Post # 4
Beautiful, but I would center the names as well!
Post # 5
I like the ‘our’ wording. I think they look great. To the PP, the names are centered, but she blurred out the last names for privacy which makes them look off centered.
Post # 6
@BellaDee: The names look centered to me! I think she just blurred the last names for privacy.
Not sure about the our/their thing though. We said “our” because we wanted it to read as if we were speaking to them. I don’t know if that’s technically correct but it’s the sound that we wanted. It also makes sense with the rest of the invitation since you continue to say “our”
I think they look great!
Post # 7
@girlygirl885: Ohhhh good call! I didn’t even notice that!
Post # 8
- Wedding: September 2012 - Southern California
I think they look really nice & assuming your last names will be added to center it all, then only thing that sticks out to me is, I think you should say, “Together with our parents, & *We invite you…”
Otherwise though, I really like the design & all!
Post # 9
- Wedding: August 2013 - The Liberty House
I agree that there are some capitalization and comma things- it just feels like there are too many commas in your wording, i think the line breaks are enough unless the commas are actually needed for grammar purposes.
Post # 10
Ah, now I see the blurred out last names. I think they look great. And I think “our” is appropriate if you are the ones hosting the wedding. “their” is for when the parents are hosting the wedding. And I don’t think you need the comma after “vows”
Post # 11
I used this article to help me when wording the date and time. I think the times don’t have to be capitalized-
Post # 12
Your invites are gorgeous! I love the nautical feel to them. Also, I don’t think you can go wrong with either “our” or “there” for the wording.
Post # 13
they look great and i like the “our” wording
Post # 14
I like “our” better. I would also maybe put a really light outline around your white placard shape, it sort of drifts into the white background of the navy/white pattern, but I love the shape so it would be nice just to give it that little bit more definition.
I would also only capitalize the first word of each paragraph rather than every line and drop the commas.
It’s a gorgeous design! You’ve done great!
Post # 15
I know the debate is ongoing regarding wording, but I want to comment on the design elements.
I would suggest that you use no more than two different fonts, and I would pair your script font with a more traditional serif or sans serif font. I think that the one you’ve chosen as your primary font is competing too much with your script font. I also would recommend that you change the font in which your venue’s name is written to the traditional serif or sans serif font I recommended above. You really do not want more than two fonts on an invitation unless you are striving for an overall effect that features many different fonts.
I would eliminate the screen of the image behind your text, as it, too, is in competition with your wording.
Finally, I would not pair the red and blue graphic elements, as they, too, are distracting from your text. I would try to simplify the design by perhaps choosing just the blue element as your border, without the red inside of it.
You definitely do not need to have a formal, traditional invitation like I had to have a beautiful invitation, since there are so many beautiful styles from which to choose. However, design principles recommend that you simplify the number of elements so as to provide contrast where it’s needed, without having too many distracting things happening.
Here is the online sample of the invitation I chose (not my own personal invitation) so that you can see what I mean about the clarity of having only two fonts and choosing fonts that have very different characteristics.
Post # 16
@BellaDee: It is centered, I have our last names blurred out. And If we change it to “Together with their parents” we have to change the wording of the entire invitation. Thank You!