Post # 1
My fiance and I as well as my mom have paid for most of the wedding but we also wanted to recognize his parents. What do you think about this wording? Is it too wordy or not worded properly for an invitation? Does anyone have any other suggestions?
Madeline A & Dustin Z
son of Mr & Mrs Dennis Z
request the honor of your presence
at their marriage.
Post # 4
The above is too confusing. There are so many people listed and they are in a strange order.
Are you ok with not recognizing that you paid? If so.. I would just use traditional wording that says
Ms. Elizabeth V requests the honor of your presense at the marriage of her daughter
son of Mr. and Mrs. Dennis Z
If you don’t like that option than just do Madeline A and Dustin Z together with their parents request the honor of your presense at their marriage.
Post # 5
it took me a few times through to understand what you were trying to say – it’s very confusing right now who is actually being married. do you need your guests to know who paid for everything? if not, why not just let your mom be the honorary hostess, and use traditional wording?
If you must stick with what you wrote, at least split up your name on a different line from your fiance’s, since you have different last names at this point. Otherwise, it sounds like you’re brother & sister!
the honor of your presence is requested at the marriage of
ms. mom’s daughter,
son of mr. and mrs. groom