Need feedback on my MOH speech!

posted 3 years ago in Bridesmaids
Post # 3
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: October 2014

I honestly think it sounds fantastic!

I think you hit all the “parts” of a good MOH speech- introduce yourself, share how you met, a story or anecdote and then wrap it up!  And of course, kudos for not forgetting to ACTUALLY toast the bride and groom!  I feel like evryone forgets this.

I think the length is good too.  No one wan’t to listen to you talk for 10 minutes.

Side note: I’ve been working on my MOH speech for my best friend (and she is also my MOH) and it starts very similarly with the part about “what goes around comes around”.  Great minds, I guess!

Post # 4
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: July 2014

@Mill:  yes. Keep it short. I’d say 5 min max. 

Post # 5
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Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2012

Maybe it’s just the pregnancy hormones, but…I cried a little, lol. I think it sounds terrific. It’s are (yes, very rare) that you find a MOH anymore that gives a speech that keeps on track and straight from the heart. Great job.

Post # 6
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: October 2013

@emma34:  take out this line:

 

For those of you who don’t know me, my name is A, and I am E’s maid of honor

 

This line makes my FI cringe.  He tells me at every wedding.  Everyone knows who you are at this point.  They’ve seen you walk down the ailse and they saw your name in the program.  If not, they will figure it out soon enough. Or when the DJ/Band announces that the Maid of Honor will give a toast.

ETA: I see you say again you are MOH in 2nd paragraph.  Why don’t you change it to this:

Hello everyone!

When E originally asked me to be her maid of honor, I must say, I was pretty pumped to share with you some really embarrassing stories about her. I am so happy and honored to be toasting to E on this amazing day. It’s been a long time coming and I can’t believe it’s finally here.

Post # 7
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: September 2013

I have to disagree with ajility. Yes everyone probably knows who you are but it’s nice to formally introduce yourself so Nana isn’t in the back asking who that is again?!

 

I loved your speech! Made me tear up a bit. 

Post # 8
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: November 1999

It’s pretty good.  I’d delete this:

When E originally asked me to be her maid of honor, I must say, I was pretty pumped to share with you some really embarrassing stories about her. But the thing is, as E has continued to remind me, what goes around comes around…and since E also happens to be MY maid of honor, and my wedding is still to come, I have decided to take the high road, and do a complimentary toast to my amazing and beautiful best friend.

It’s totally irrelevent and you’re giving yourself a compliment “taking the high road.”  I hate when people say that about themselves.  Oh look at me I’m a good friend casue I’m not embarrasing someone on their wedding day.  Toasts which set out to embarrass usually end up being tastless with a room full of people cringing and wondering why the bride would chose a person like that to be their MOH in the first place.  Please don’t pat yourself on the back for not being this MOH.  Skip it and move on.

Post # 9
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: November 1999

@ajillity81:  I agree.  Who else would you be but the MOH since you’re the one speaking?

Post # 10
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2013

@Atalanta:  @ajillity81:  I agree with both of these suggestions.

Honestly, my MOH’s speech was fantastic (and was the only time that I cried at the wedding, damn her!), and it was similar.

Post # 11
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Bumble bee

I like you speech, its very personable and funny. Although I would mention your wedding less. Because you mention that you’re the MOH twice right away, I would probably re-word your beginning like this:

Hello everyone! My name is A, and I am so happy and honored to be toasting to E on this amazing day. It’s been a long time coming and I can’t believe it’s finally here.

When E originally asked me to be her maid of honor, I must say, I was pretty pumped to share with you some really embarrassing stories about her. But the thing is, as E has continued to remind me, what goes around comes around…so I have decided to NOT tempt fate today.  I’ll take the high road (could throw in a “this time”), and do a complimentary toast to my amazing and beautiful best friend.”

And I would re-word the 3rd paragrpah more like this:
“E has been my partner in crime ever since. Since the day we met she has been by my side for all the major events in my life, a most loyal friend, and the first person I go to most often for advice, usually during long walks or jogs around Fern Avenue. Eventually things with E and C got pretty serious and they moved in together. A few years ago I had decided to go travelling, and when I needed a place to stay for just a couple of months, E and C so generously opened their home to me. A year and a half later…when I finally moved out…and E had essentially found me my future husband and convinced him to take me on…it was like leaving home for the first time.”

I made really small changes, they just make it flow a little better in my head and  point of theattention just a bit more to your friend.

Sounds like you guys have a lovely friendship, good job on the speech!

Post # 12
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: January 2014

Great speech.

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