(Closed) Need Grammar Savvy Bees – Program Help!

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2010

You could either list each entry on a separate line or use semicolons between each entry.  Either of those would seem to work.

Post # 4
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: June 2012

As a former copy editor, I second rachel leigh – semicolons are appropriate (NOT colons), as would be listing each group on a separate line begining with a “bullet point” or other point-marker and ending with a semicolon for all groups up to the last, which should have a period. Good luck!

Post # 6
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: August 2010

Do you have enough space to put them on separate lines?  I think that would look best.

When you say “her” or “his” do you mean the bride or the groom or are you referring to someone else?  I found that confusing.  How about changing the wording to something like “Jane Doe, Aunt to the Bride”?

Post # 7
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: June 2012

So sorry for your losses, but it’s sweet of you to remember them in this way! For ease of reading I would maybe split up your family members and your fiance’s family members into two paragraphs (if space allows! If it doesn’t, the way you posted it works too), such that it looks like this:

Today and every day we remember:

* Bride’s grandparents xx; aunts xx; …; and

* Groom’s grandparents xx; great-grandmother xx; xxx.

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