(Closed) Need help on wording invitations pleeeeeeeeeease, in a time crunch

posted 5 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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1696 posts
Bumble bee

@kris325:  Your two paragraphs are in three conflicting styles: this one

Britany & Steven request your presence on March 26th 2013 for their wedding

is in the formal third-person wording that traditionally indicates a formal party, and this one

The wedding will be held at 1234 first street Clearwater Florida 56789 at 3pm. Please RSVP by March first by phone (555)555-5555 or email at [email protected].

is in the natural sentence-structure that is proper for wording an informal or casual invitation — and it reads well and naturally, and is in good taste. This “sentence”:

Casual attire.

is in choppy businesslike bullet-point but combines “casual” with the rather pompous formal two-dollar word “attire”.

Let’s get it all into the same style! You’ve got your names and dates at the top of the card, so you don’t need to repeat them at the top. So start with the request,  using natural sentences and word-choice — it runs quite naturally into your second paragraph. Something like:

Please join us for our wedding, at 1234 first street Clearwater Florida 56789 at 3pm. The party will be casual. Please reply to say whether you can come, by phone (555)555-5555 or email at [email protected].

Love,

Britany & Steven

It’s nice if you can use a hand-writing font, and a glyph of your actual signature at the end.

Post # 5
Member
4687 posts
Honey bee
  • Wedding: June 2013 - Upstate NY

I would say:

 

Britany & Steven are getting married!

 

March 26th, 2013

3:00 in the afternoon

at

Venue Location Name

1234 first street

Clearwater, Florida

Please RSVP by March 1 e (555)555-5555 or email [email protected]

Casual attire

 

[no neeed for zip code]

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