Please critique my invite before I order!

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 4
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288 posts
Helper bee

I just noticed that the word “their” was used 4 times…seems a little excessive!

Post # 5
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: March 2014

I’m not sure where you live, but in the US it’s more standard to write the year out without the ‘and’ (two thousand fourteen). However, it’s definitely not “wrong,” just not standard!

Post # 7
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Newbee
  • Wedding: April 2014

“as they begin a new life together” or “as they begin this new life together”

Post # 8
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: September 2014

@tinaisodd:  this exactly.  I was going to suggest the same thing – as they begin a new life togtether.  

I also completely overlooked the first line with the families.  I think you should take out one other their saying “support their joy and love”

Also the font is really light and hard to read.  Sorry to critical but I think that is what you are looking for. 

Post # 10
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: October 2010

@magnolia87:  Font along the top is too close to the edge. Need some white space like along the bottom.

Also the font is waaaaaay to small. Make the “Together with”, “Invite you” and “As they” lines bigger. 

Take out the “the” and “and” in the date. 

Post # 13
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: January 1994

I like the second better, as it doesn’t say ‘their’ so many times.

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