(Closed) Please help me edit our invites!

posted 5 years ago in Etiquette
Post # 3
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

They shouldn’t be an “and” in two thousand and thirteen.  Should be “two thousand thirteen.”

 

Post # 5
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

@icetea:  The “and” is fine actually. You can do it either way, with an “and” is the more formal way.  Also, 5:00 is technically the afternoon, but I know it does sound kind of weird to write afternoon for an evening wedding.

Post # 7
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: June 2013

@icetea:  I think it would be “Half past five in the afternoon,” but I do recall reading someone’s post that said “Half after five” was the ‘proper’ way to say it. “Half past” sounds better to me. 🙂

Post # 8
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

@icetea:  yes 6:00 starts evening. We’re doing a 5:30 ceremony though and put evening. I didn’t like the way afternoon sounded.

Post # 9
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Buzzing bee

I think “in the exchanging of their wedding vows” sounds weird.  You could say “…..in the exchange of their wedding vows” – that sounds better to me!  

Post # 10
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Helper bee

The phrase that stood out to me was “celebrate in the exchanging of their wedding vows.”  Somehow, using the word “in” throws me – it seems to imply the participation of your guests, which may have been intentional.  If that’s the case, could you say “invite you to join them in celebrating the exchange of their wedding vows” or “invite you to celebrate with them as they exchange wedding vows” instead? 

Post # 11
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

I’d change it to 

“Invite you to celebrate as they exchange wedding vows”

Or “Invite you to celebrate with them as they exchange wedding vows” 

Post # 14
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Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: March 2012 - Pelican Grand Beach Resort

I would say “as they exchange vows”

The gerund you used (exchanging) is just kind of akward, and I wouldn’t bother with “wedding” vows. Obviosuly they are wedding vows… which I think should actually be marriage vows, but I’m not positive on that.

I’d also use a non-italics font for your names and reduce the RSVP line size… that shouldn’t dominate your invitation so much.

Post # 16
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Buzzing bee

@icetea:  Just a style edit, but I’d put a space before the address. Right now it’s a big block of text and a little unreadable. I checked with some old wedding invites I have and they all placed the address in a separate paragraph.

As for the time, it would be either “half past five in the afternoon” or “half past five o’clock in the afternoon.”

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