- 3 years ago
- Wedding: May 2014
So while putting together ideas for our ceremony script I found a little excerpt online that I loved and wanted to include, however it didn’t quite flow and something about the wording was slightly off and I haven’t been able to figure out a way to reword it. I gave the script to our officiant (who is family) who changed it, but IMO it actually sounds more choppy? FYI-I am including the first sentence (which will stay as is) in each option so that you get the idea of the flow (hopefully)
Original excerpt “Marriage is the coming together of two lives, a celebration of the love between two people. As you embrace one another in your love, so to do you embrace the families that have been brought together.”
Officiant rewording “Marriage is the coming together of two lives, a celebration of the love between two people. As each of you here in attendance today embrace one another in your love, so too do you embrace the families that have been brought together on this occasion.
This excerpt leads into the rose ceremony:
*Officiant hands b/g roses*
These roses represent a gift your parents passed onto you when you were born: the gift of everlasting love. Their love for you has brought them great happiness and great challenges, but did not ever diminish as they met those challenges..they have guided you to be the people that you are today.
B and G would now like the thank their moms. The love and sacrifice that each of their mothers have made have greatly influenced who they have become. They realize that their own capacity to love and be loved was shaped by these exceptional woman and want to thank them for the support and love shown to them over the years.
I’ve been playing around with the words trying to make it a smoother transition…but i’m not having any luck. Maybe its because I saw the excerpt originally and am having a hard time leaving that idea? I’m hoping you guys might be able to help me out and offer ideas that are not coming to me.