Please proof-read my invite before I finalize my order…

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

should the first line say shared instead of shares?

Post # 4
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: May 2014

Because you have shares in our lives” Should probably be shared instead of shares…you’re not a CSA.  😉

Post # 6
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: May 2014

@FutureMrsLAL:  Oh, good.  🙂  The rest looks good to me!  And bonfire – fun!  I’m considering that as well, since our venue allows it…

Post # 7
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: June 2014

Here’s what I would do (changes in bold):

Because you have shared in our lives
In friendship and love,
Mary Jane Smith
and
John James Jones
Invite you to share the beginning of
The next chapter in our lives together
When we exchange vows on
Saturday, the fifth of October
Two thousand thirteen
At four o’clock in the afternoon
etc.

Post # 8
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Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2013 - Rocky Mountains USA

“by” your friendship and love sounds really weird to me…  how about “through”?

Post # 9
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Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2012

@lolot:  +1 to “through”

Post # 10
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: August 2013

Here is my thought: (changes are bold/italic/underline)

Because you have shared in our lives

with your friendship and love, we

Bride’s Full Name

and

Groom’s Full Name

Invite you to join us as we begin

The next chapter of our lives together,

As we exchange vows on

Saturday, the fifth of October

Two thousand thirteen

At four o’clock in the afternoon

Venue Name

Venue Address

Reception and bonfire to follow

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