Post # 1
Just wanted some other eyes to look at my invite wording before I order. I’ve been staring at it for days so it’s hard to tell if there’s any errors!
Some things were meant to be
together with their families
invite you to their
Friday, the twenty first of September
Two thousand and twelve
at Half past six in the evening
East Bridgewater, Massachusetts
Dinner, Drinks and awkward but enthusiastic dancing to follow
Please respond by August 21
___ Will be there with dancing shoes!
___ Sorry, have to miss it!
Please initial each guests entree choice
___ Sautéed chicken Francaise
___ Grilled filet mignon
Please note any food allergies
Request a song
Post # 3
You can take the “and” out of the year: “two thousand twelve”
I was also a little puzzled by some of the capitalization …?
Post # 4
Hyphenate “twenty-first of September.”
Apostrophe in “each guest’s entrée choice.” That’s an accent over the “e,” also.
I agree about the capitalization–only capitalize pronouns or the first word in a sentence, so “half past six” and “drinks” should not be capitalized.
Wording-wise, though, you’re good to go!
Post # 5
@KCKnd2: yeah the capitalization is random (I solved for this by using an all caps font) i.e. Sauteed Chicken Fancaise or Sauteed chicken francaise would look much better
Pretty sure twenty-first is hypehnated…
Post # 6
I should have clarified the style of invite all the letters in all the words are capital so I think we’re good there.
Thanks for the other tips I knew you bees would be able to assist!
Post # 7
Okay, so if the font is all capitalized, here are my suggestions:
- “Some things were meant to be.” This is a sentance, does not continue with next line, so it needs a period.
- “Marriage celebration” sounds like its just a reception. Are you inviting guests to watch you get married by an officiant, or to an after-party only? If marriage, then maybe change to just “marriage” or “as they are joined in marriage.” Dinner, drinks, and dancing implies celebration later on.
- Keep “two thousand and twelve”
- If you invite 2 people but only 1 can come, how do they check their RSVP card? Do you want them to write names in the yes/no lines? Check marks only? Number of guests coming? Maybe clarify this.
- “Sorry, will have to miss it!” Put the word ‘will’ in there to match your ‘yes’ option.
- “Please inital an entrée choice for each guest.” or “Please initial each guests’ entrée choice.” Note the periods at the end of the sentance.
- Where do guests note food allergies? Maybe give them a line for this.
Post # 8
Keep the “and” in the date. One says “two hundred and four” not “two hundred four” Or “nineteen hundred and ninety” not “nineteen hundred ninety” (those are two separate numbers).
I would also make the “H” in half lowercase.
I agree with @Zouave‘s list too.