Proofread my Invitation… please :)

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 4
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Blushing bee

I think it looks great. I read it twice, I don’t see any spelling errors. Congrats!

Post # 5
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Newbee
  • Wedding: July 2013

The wording is good. I didn’t spot any errors.

Post # 6
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: April 2014

I would say “Saturday, the 5th of October, at” and “A valet will be available”.

Post # 7
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Newbee
  • Wedding: September 2013

If you’re following the etiquette books, I think you would write:

“Saturday, the fifth of October”

“at half past four o’clock”

“City, State” (no address, you could post this on your wedding website)

“Dinner and Dancing to follow”

A Block of rooms has been reserved at ____ hotel, please mention the Anderson/Brooks wedding.

 

Post # 9
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Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: June 2013

Are you 100% sure all of your guests have internet access?

Post # 10
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Sugar bee

@engleman10513:  Since you’re referring to yourselves in the third person, you should change your wording to “Together with their parents” and “invite you to share their joy,” etc.

I’m also not a fan of the passive voice (“A shuttle will be provided” versus “We will be providing a shuttle”).

Post # 13
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: April 2015

You might consider spacing your last names a bit – more even with your first names. The last names kind of run together when I read it. 

Post # 15
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: May 2013

You might care to include the year. It might seem obvious that this is 2013 but dates are still better concluded with the year they take place. I’d also put “Together with Their Parents” after your names. This reads better and allows the eye to be drawn to your decorative font first:

So:

Johnny & Cori
ANDERSON BROOKS
Together With Their Parents

Invite you to share their joy as they 
celebrate their Union with Christ

on

Saturday 5th October 2013

at 4.30pm

Wherever You Are Getting Married

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