(Closed) Proofread my vows?

posted 6 years ago in Ceremony
Post # 3
435 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

Couple of tiny things:

– I would not use contractions in such a formal piece of speaking (“I would” instead of “I’d”, “you have” instead of “you’ve” etc). You want it to be formal, not casual.

– “I cannot imagine waking up without you by my side” implies you already do wake up with him by your side, in other words, sleeping in the same bed. Nothing wrong with that (my fiance and I live together!) but do you want to draw attention to that in church? Totally fine if you do, just wanted to share how it reads. 

– I would change “I promise to never give up on us” to something more positive. Obviously you are saying a sweet thing, but in vows I would say what wonderful things you WOULD do, not what bad thing you WON’T do. Maybe something like “I will always be there for you”– I mean I guess you already said that with “I promise to always stand by your side and lift you up” already says that, but just wanted to give an idea of how to change a negative that you won’t do into a positive that you WILL do. 

Good luck! way to write your own vows, I am sure your husband will love them 🙂

Post # 4
3569 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: April 2013

First poster raised some good points. However I love those last three lines and would leave them in. I love personal vows and I think there is nothing wrong with acknowledgeing that you are ready to fight for your family/love if you have too, that is the way I took that line not in a negative light.

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