(Closed) Rate my MOH Speech

posted 6 years ago in Reception
Post # 3
1747 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: May 2012

“To a fault, Tammy seeks out the positive,

You see..My friend Tammy, as some of you might know is a hopeless romantic.

She lives a fairytale world where love is at first site, and dreams really do come true.”

I generally very much like your speech and I know what you’re going for. Your friend seems to be a very whimsical girl who is less guarded than most, which is kind of a rarity, but great all the same.

I think the tone of these few lines I have highlighted, although you mean the best, paints her as naive borderline crazy? I know that your crowd will mostly know what Tammy is about, but the choice of wording, particularly, “to a fault finding the positive” has a negative connotation, and I don’t think MOH’s should really focus on anything negative or leave anything up for interpretation. What makes it worse is the line, “she lives  a fairy tale world” which, combined with the first thing I mentioned, makes her seem like she lives in “lala land”, but in a bad way and that reality is far different than the world she chooses to live in.

I think it’s great that your best friend believes in the good in people, seeks out the positive, and believes in fairy tales and didn’t settle for anything less than that feeling. I’m just wondering if there’s another way to express that.

As a stranger, it doesn’t hit the perfect note as it is right now, but I think with some minor tweaking, it could be perfect.

Post # 4
3618 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: November 2011

I think it has too much back story about you and Tammy. I would definitely tune you out and stop listening after the first 10 lines. The rest of it was fine, once you incorporated the groom into the speech. I also agree with PP that you should re-word Tammy’s “fault”, you kind of make her sound like a Kim Kardashian –will marry the first guy that asks.

Post # 6
7293 posts
Busy Beekeeper
  • Wedding: October 2011

I agree with the PP.

Short and sweet speech , but the bulk of it is doubting her ability to see clearly about a man. As a stranger , i don’t feel like you were 100 % gung ho about him. But then again if everyone knows tammy is a hopeless romantic, then it may be good humor.Maybe focus more on how you knew Dan would be awesome for her etc etc? Share a funny story?

Post # 8
1488 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

I think you should add in more about the bride and groom’s relationship. The speech has A LOT about you and your friendship with the bride, but nothing much about the groom. Most people expect the speeches to be about the couple, not the Maid/Matron of Honor or Best Man’s relationship with the bride or groom.

Other than that, I think it’s great!

Post # 9
2638 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: November 2006

Oh I looooooooooove this. It’s so sweet.

Post # 10
1622 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: September 2012

I think it’s too much about you and Tammy, and needs to focus more on the bride & groom. I also don’t think your original skepticism of their relationship should be brought up.

I really like this last part though:

And I hope that it continues to be as magical as it has been so far…

I’ve always admired the way Tammy looks at life, and she looks at Daniel the same way: With the wonder and awe of someone who is truly in love.

Denial, you are a lucky guy to find someone as bright, warm, cheerful, and beautiful as Tammy all in one package.

I really wish, on every star in the sky, the very best for you two… may you make your own kind of music, and live life the way your dreams have mapped. You both totally deserve the best!

Post # 11
12881 posts
Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: November 1999

I agree, too much backstory.  At my sister’s wedding, the best man’s speech was all backstory about how they were friends from kindergarten, and I literally stopped listening until I heard my sister’s name…about 15 seconds from the end of the speech.  I think parts are funny, but a lot of it comes off as almost judgey or playfully insulting (after reading this, I think the bride is an airhead, to be perfectly honest).

Post # 13
532 posts
Busy bee

I agree with PPs who said it is about you and Tammy a little too much. More about her and her relationship should be incorporated.

I also think you should re-work these lines. They don’t come across the way I think you intend them to.

She lives a fairytale world where love is at first site, and dreams really do come true.

And though it always works out in HER mind, I wasn’t quite as easily convinced…

As any sensible friend to someone like Tammy- should, it’s my job to keep her feet on the ground, or else she’d float away!

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