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I think this is a really cute idea! But the first and second lines really aren't working for me, and I think it's the fact that San Francisco and aglow really don't rhyme in the context of those two lines.
I would maybe split up the cowgirl and surfer boy into two separate lines, and leave out San Fran all together, since that's an impossible word to rhyme, and it throws the rhythm off.
I would try something like:
A girl once met a boy
She roped cows, and surfing was his joy.
Something along those lines. You're off to a really good start- those cards sound super cute!!
i agree with powderpuff that the first few lines don't flow as well as the rest, but it's a really cute STD.
I know, those first few lines are killing me! I was trying to incorporate the fact that I moved out to San Francisco, and that is where we met....also tried rhyming with California (impossible) and west coast (more doable) but I am stuck!
A cowgirl relocated to those California hills~
Soon found a surfer boy who gave her heart a thrill!
A cowgirl who relocated to those San Fransico hills
Soon found a surfer boy who gave her heart a thrill.
With his wit and his charm, he wooed her each day
and they knew this life was one they wanted to stay.
One beautiful day, he got down on one knee,
And the Cowgirl could not contain her glee!
She had dreamed of that Surfer Boy Prince her entire life,
and this July 3rd he will make her his wife.
Thank you so much! My mom also had the idea to say "San Francisco Bay" so I am trying to think of something that rhymes with that.....
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Because my fiance is a surfer boy from california and I am a cowgirl from Texas, we thought it would be fun to do a cute little poem on our save the dates with a picture of a cowboy boot and a surf board or something of the like. I am writing the poem, and it needs some help! I am especially stuck on the 2nd line. Any and all suggestions appreciated!!!!
A Cowgirl met a Surfer Boy in San Francisco,
And from that moment on, she was all aglow!
With his wit and his charm, he stole her heart,
and they knew their life together was just about to start.
One beautiful day, he got down on one knee,
And the Cowgirl could not contain her glee!
She had dreamed of that Surfer Boy her entire life,
and this July 3rd he will make her his wife.