(Closed) Wording Critique, please

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: September 2010

One thing that popped out at me.. isnt it usually preferred for Catholic invites to read “mass uniting their daughter First Middle & (or AND) First Middle Last in the sacrament…” – instead of the “First Middle TO First Middle Last” as you have it currently? To better reflect the partnership or something like that, if I’m remembering what I read correctly.

Personally, I think the i/we is kind of unneccessary — you could just use “decline with regrets” and “accepts with pleasure”, because you have the M___ line above. I’ve always read it like a fill in the blank to create one sentence, ie “Mr & Mrs Last Name decline with regrets.”

I like the intro at the top of the RSVP – I say keep it to make the RSVP card a little different than the norm!

 

Post # 5
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Sugar bee

We did ‘And’ as well, instead of TO, and both just had our first and middle names, though both of our parents were mentioned before us so last names were mentioned there.  To me the invite looked off center with only one last name included.

Are his parents alright with not being on the invite?

Edit:  I guess with how you have it worded though with it being your parents doing the inviting the TO makes more sense

Post # 6
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Sugar bee

We also mentioned on the invite that dinner and merriment were to follow so they would know it was not just to the wedding itself that they were invited.   This was important to my hubs family as in their culture that often happens that you’re only invited to the wedding, or just the wedding and apps, and only certain people then stay for the dinner.

Post # 8
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

Is the reply card going to be in all caps too? If not, I would remove the upper case “S” in “Seat” here: “We have reserved __ Seat(s) in your honour”

I agree with madras that the “i/we” is not necessary in the reply card.

Post # 10
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Sugar bee

Sometimes though the parents like to be mentioned, such as son of ………

But not always, I’d just make sure no feelings are going to be hurt since there were a couple posts last week about that and since wedding traditions seem to be so varied b/w families.

Post # 11
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

Okay, then def no worries about “Seat” 🙂

Otherwise, it all looked good to me. And my understanding is the same as yours, that usually only the hosts are named on the invitation. Although, if you really want to include his folks, you can add a line under his name saying “son of Mr & Mrs Lastname”…but that is def optional.

Post # 14
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Sugar bee

Hmmm….OK I know you changed it to ‘&’ but it doesn’t quite make sense the way you have it written.  If you leave out their daughter then it makes sense, if you leave it in it sounds a bit like incest.

Here are some other examples for brides parents doing the inviting.

http://www.weddinginvitations.be/verses/index.php?verses=bridesparents

 

Post # 16
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Worker bee
  • Wedding: March 2011

Just a thought:  I think most invitations also include the year?  (I know it’s usually obvious, but it’s been on all the invitations I’ve ever seen.)  And don’t most usually include the time of day, like “four o’clock in the afternoon”?

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