(Closed) 1st resume ever…

posted 5 years ago in Career
Post # 4
3281 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: January 2014

Hey! So I actually teach resume writing sometimes, so PM me if you have questions! Overall you have a good basic start, but it needs some polishing!

Here is some basic feedback:

-Objective section is good, but if you’re sending this just to the one restaurant, you ought to put the restaurant name in there; also, you have “commitment” and “objectives” spelled wrong.

-You should combine all of the positions with ABC company into one entry: your first bullet point would say something like: Advanced from Server (Sept 2012) to Bartender (Date), Certified Trainer (Date), and Serves Professional (Date) – also, should that be Service Professional? I’ve never seen “Serves Professional” like that

-For that one, it’ll be longer than the others, but still don’t put more than like 5-6 total bullet points

-Your bullet points for ALL of the positions should be in past tense: so, “provided,” “trained,” etc.

-Your bullet points also would be improved if you could give actual numbers, e.g. “Trained 20 new employees,” “Led 1 team meeting each week,” “Handled over $10,000 of business per day,” or whatever. Not necessarily in ALL of them, but some well-placed numbers always looks better

-Under Bartender, you want “alcohol sales” – right now both of those words are misspelled

-Other misspellings: performance (under ABC and DEF), duties (under DEF), and available (under References)

– I would also change all of your “guest” to “guests” – like, you provided all of the guests with menu knowledge, not just one! 😉

-I’m not sure why the word References is on there twice: either list the references or say that they’re available upon request–don’t do both

Hope that’s helpful! I hope this didn’t come off as too harsh–like I said, I teach this, so I know it can be really tough, especially for your first draft!

Post # 5
8471 posts
Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2012

Make sure you use past tense for the last two things you stopped doing in 2012

Post # 6
419 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: January 2014

I agree with the changes others mentioned. Also, you need to change “insure” to “ensure.” You’re not selling insurance (http://www.diffen.com/difference/Ensure_vs_Insure). 
If you want to mention your high school experience, you should list the name of your high school, and your GPA, activities, etc. Did you graduate? It’s not clear from your resume. It might be more helpful to say “graduated May 2009,” than to list the years you attended. Honestly, though, I don’t know that mentioning high school is necessary. They’re going to care way more about your restaurant experience than your high school education. I think you would be much better off deleting this section, and listing your references instead.  
Also, do you have Microsoft Word? A lot of the misspellings in your resume could be caught by a spell checker. If you don’t have a program, like Microsoft Word, that can detect spelling errors, you can use this website: http://www.spellcheck.net/.  
Also, I think that you could improve the skills you listed for waitressing and bartending. Both of those jobs require a lot of time management and organizational skills. Do a Google Search for “restaurant management resume examples.” You can probably find examples of skills to list. Good luck!

Post # 7
519 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2014

One thing I learned in college is to not include an objective – they know that you are looking for work. That basic stuff is included in your cover letter, not on your actual resume. 

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