Post # 1
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Worker bee
Hey Bee’s! I am having a hard time loading my invitation, but I wanted to throw the wording out there to ya! There are paisleys on the upper right corner and lower left corner..Our names will be in a LARGE font…. Tell me what you think!
Because you have shared
In our lives by your
Friendship and love, we
Kristal King
&
Anthony Johnson
Together with our families
Invite you to share the
Beginning of our new life
Together as we become one
Sunday, The Fourteenth of
October
Two Thousand and Twelve
At 4:30 In the Afternoon
*LOCATION OF CHAPEL AND ADDRESS*
Reception to Follow
Post # 3
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Bumble bee
It sounds good! I think I would change where you have some of the line breaks though, if possible.
My preference would be:
Because you have shared in our lives
By your friendship and love, we
(names)
It would also bug me to have the word “together” twice in a few lines… can you reword so you don’t repeat yourself?
Post # 4
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Buzzing bee
definately fix the line breaks, it was awkward to read
Post # 7
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Worker bee
sorry thats not the best pic..but i found away to get it up here..what do you think of that now? i changed the layout of the words a little bit..
Post # 8
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Helper bee
I think I would move over the “reception to follow” if you could. From this view, its a little close to the florish. I think the rest looks great. I can’t think of any other way to reword it, other than changing it, so you aren’t saying together more than once in a sentance. I’m wondering what it would look like if you added an extra line between “together with our families” and “invite you to share”.
Post # 9
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Bumble bee
@MissKK: Looks good but you still need to lose the “AND” in 2012 (it should read “TWO THOUSAND TWELVE”)
I’d probably make the “RECEPTION TO FOLLOW” flush right, in a smaller font and/or in italics or something
Post # 10
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Worker bee
Thanks ladies!!! I appreciate your help! 🙂
Post # 11
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Worker bee
@MissKK: if you want to get all grammatically correct about it too, “Kristal King & Anthony Johnson” is an appositive describing the pronoun we; hence, they have to be enclosed in commas. but of course, there’s no need to be all formal and proper like that. just saying 🙂
i also mentioned it in another thread that, to each their own, but i’m not a fan of spelled-out dates and times. they are so hard to read. when i look at an invitation, i want to be able to easily pinpoint the date and time. “October 14, 2012 | 4:30 PM” works for me, but that’s just me.
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