Post # 1
Hi Bees! I have a background in graphic design, but I am waaaay out of practice. I’ve been working on the design for my invites. I thought it was pretty good, but when I went back to Pinterest for inspiration, I felt like mine looked like a mess.
The entire theme is Rainbow Colored (except green), and it’s a fun/casual beach wedding. The decor is very flower-centric, and I thought the watercolor style kind of played off the beach.
I’m pretty sure the problem is my design is lacking in whitespace/contrast. I’d love to hear any design suggestions you have! Also, I wanted the wording to be fun and warm, but it might be lacking in the “fun” department.
Does this look like a professional invite, or is it not quite there?
Post # 3
- Wedding: August 2013 - The Liberty House
I would like it if all the text were the same color, right now it looks a little busy with the two shades of grey. Also, the stuff that is lighter looks less important as it is right now, when really it’s the most important information.
The wording is also a little funky but I don’t have any suggestions right now for an improved version (helpful, I know!)
Post # 4
@sunsetchristy: I like it as is, including the lighter grey. I, too, think the wording is a little awkward but can’t think of how else to include your parents’ names! I’ll be stalking this for better ideas because both SO & I have one deceased parent with the other not remarried, so we’ll be in the same boat.
Post # 5
Uhm, these are seriously awesome! I’m an artsy person myself, so the watercolor won me over immediately. I like the wording and I also like the simple font(s) you used–it doesn’t distract from the colorful imagery, but is still easy to read!
Post # 6
First: I love the bottom flower and the way you’ve done your first names.
I would add a bit more floral to the top, if you can. The bottom one is so vibrant, and that one is so small.
Reword the whole first half (up to your names; and be sure to include your last names for people who know several Christys and Jons, unless they’re the same as your listed parents’ names). As it is, it’s unclear whose parent is whose or if they’re both one person’s. Either “Together with their parents, Christy & Jon invite you to … ” or “James ____ and Elizabeth ____ invite you to a celebration of love (etc.) as their children Christy & Jon …”
I might also do a more slender/taller font, and I agree with keeping it all in darker gray (or trying something like navy or deep purple).
Post # 7
OMG. The design is SO COOL! I absolutely LOVE it!!
The wording is fine. No one will care if it’s a little wordy. 😉
Post # 8
Thanks everyone! The critique is really helpful. My mom and fiance keep saying everything is fine, but I really feel it’s not there yet.
It wasn’t very clear the way I blocked things out, but the way it reads is
[My dad’s first] & [My mom’s first] [Our last name] and [His mom’s first] [His mom’s last] & [His dad’s first] [He and his dad’s last]
because his parents are divorced.
I’m going to keep working on wording and design. Will post an update soon!
Post # 9
- Wedding: August 2013 - The Liberty House
By The Way I forgot to add that I think you did a seriously awesome job and the design is great, I would love opening one of these up. Sorry that I jumped straight to the nitpicks =)
Post # 10
That’s cool!!!! You did a great job!!!! I went to school for Graphic Design as well and looking to design my invitations so hopefully I will do a great job like you!
Post # 11
Those are super cute with the watercolour effect. Maybe just no light grey font though, it gets washed out by everything else – keeping it dark grey might make a big difference.
Post # 12
these are GORGEOUS. I love the variation in the fonts (having them both be grey keeps it from being too busy, and lets the other colors pop), and love the asymmetry of the large flowers at the bottom and small petals at the top.
the only thing I *might* still do if this were mine is to test out other fonts for the grey text. I think this one looks completely fine (and I like that it is clean-looking and doesn’t distract), but there may be another one that you wouldn’t have thought of but when you see it in the invitation you realize it’s perfect. this just happened to me, which is why I’m suggesting it. 🙂
good luck! can we see your reply card too??
Post # 14
I think they are beautiful as is!
Post # 16
Everyone’s feedback was so helpful! I made all of the text the same gray (but a bit darker), and balanced out the flowers a little differently. I ended up changing the message font to the typeface I used as inspiration for our names (Mishka), so it adds a little more character.
I changed the wording because it was obviously bad, but I’m still up for suggestions for that first line!
The back of the invitation will have some information about the venue and our website. We’re doing online RSVPs, so there won’t be any other paper in the envelope. The back of the invite and the envelopes will be blue.