(Closed) casual wedding invite wording? suggestions?

posted 6 years ago in Paper
  • poll: Is this wording TOO casual for a casual wedding?
    Too Casual... : (1 votes)
    4 %
    Eh, its probably okay : (4 votes)
    17 %
    Its fine, leave it : (10 votes)
    43 %
    Its okay, but change ______ (suggestions below) : (8 votes)
    35 %
  • Post # 4
    Member
    6892 posts
    Busy Beekeeper
    • Wedding: March 2012

    I voted it’s fine, but change _____.

    I personally think that you can leave “roughly” off, just because that is SUPER casual, and you’d probably prefer if people got there sooner rather than later.

    And maybe I’m just a downer, but I don’t like that “good food” is the first thing. I get it – we are total foodies – but at the same time…aren’t ya vowing love? And a bit of that mushy stuff?

    Also, spelling police: it’s lieu. 😉

    I think it’s really cute though in general! Definitely gives off the right vibe.

    Post # 6
    Member
    869 posts
    Busy bee

    OMG I LOVE it!  Serious wedding envy right now – sounds like a BLAST!

    Post # 7
    Member
    2849 posts
    Sugar bee
    • Wedding: May 2012

    @globalmargaret:  I think that sentence sounds much better than the original one. Sounds like a fun wedding!

    Post # 8
    Member
    104 posts
    Blushing bee
    • Wedding: May 2012

    Sounds like a lot of fun! One thing I’d change (other than the food being first, which has already been addressed!Wink) is the “short but heartfelt ceremony.” It sounds a little apologetic, like you’re sorry it’s short, so you’re stressing it will be hearfelt also. How about just, “Our short, heartfelt ceremony will be followed by…”?

    Post # 9
    Member
    52 posts
    Worker bee
    • Wedding: September 2012

    Ok, well, your first sentence might be viewed as a bit off-putting to some:

    “no church, no aisle, no chairs…”

    The majority of married couples had one or more of the 3.

    I would not open with what you AREN’T having, I would open with what you ARE! A couple in love doing it your way.

     

    I also don’t get the “tundra” reference. Are you having a picnic in the snow somewhere???

    Post # 10
    Member
    241 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: May 2012

    Oh my gosh!  Wonderful  –   at first I thought the Tundra thing was a bit extra – but that’s just because its not a word in my everyday vocabulary.  

    I would remove the “of a lifetime” after the word Journey.  Only because you say “A Lifetime” shortly after.  And in my opinion (which doesn’t really mean much – because it is your wedding and it really matters what you and yours think) the “a lifetime” sounds better in the last sentence on the front.

     

    Good luck

     

    Where did you find this template – its super cute

    Post # 11
    Member
    8439 posts
    Bumble Beekeeper

    I think it is good but the only thing that concerned me was (and this could be logistical as well):

    A short but heartfelt ceremony followed by potluck celebration, games, bonfire, camping, lots of music, and awkward but enthusiastic dancing

    As we join our families we would love to include some love and traditions from your family. In lue of gifts please consider bringing one of your most cherished family recipes. Unconventional, traditional, or foreign, we can’t wait to try them all! 

    For those who are unfamiliar with the area, a beautiful but possibly dusty hike is involved. Mud, gravel, ripe blueberries and stream crossings are all to be expected so please dress accordingly.

    Is the ceremony site and the reception site the same? Because it might be a bit tough for some guests to hike in whilst carrying a dish! Plus the food safety issues of keeping things warm etc.

    If they aren’t the same you might want to mention that and ask them to drop food off prior to the hike because food sitting in cars is really bad food safety!

    Post # 12
    Member
    1577 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2012

    Sounds great!

    Perfect wording for what you’re planning, and I like the changes that the other Bees have sugested.

    What about “embarking together into forever” 

    Post # 13
    Member
    1577 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2012

    I would like to add that tundra is totally in my regular vocabulary, but so is couloir, cirque and tarn.

    Post # 15
    Member
    241 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: May 2012

    @globalmargaret:  When you finish them Can you post a pic?  I love seeing all the different invites.  🙂  

    Post # 16
    Member
    21 posts
    Newbee
    • Wedding: August 2013

    I’m curious what you ended up going with

    The topic ‘casual wedding invite wording? suggestions?’ is closed to new replies.

    Find Amazing Vendors