(Closed) Could someone take 5 minutes out of their Saturday…

posted 6 years ago in Career
Post # 3
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Buzzing bee

@soon2bhis: I’m going through it, it may take me a minute.

Post # 4
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: January 1993

@soon2bhis:  I realized I have developed exceptional organizational skills and have an above average understanding and (useage) of computers. 


At first glance, that sentence should go. I think waaaaaaay too many people could say that – it doesn’t make you stand out.

Get specific. What is the job and what skills are they looking for? Basic customer service or office assistant? List that you are well-versed in Outlook, Excel – work in skills or terms that are mentioned in the listing. 

 

Good luck!

 

(also hope the police were able to do something about your cray-cray neighbor!)

Post # 6
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: June 2011

Here’s what I came up with. I changed a few things and noticed you used I realized A LOT so I cut a bit out.

 

What do you think?

 

1.    Tell us about your customer service background and how you feel it has prepared you for this position?

I have worked in customer service for over five years. My experience has ranged from fast food restaurants to cafes and even healthcare.  Throughout the years I have developed clear and effective verbal and written communication skills and have become very attuned to listening to what the consumer wants and needs.  Since entering the healthcare field, I have further developed certain skills; namely the ability to prioritize and remain flexible in order to ensure high efficiency, calm demeanor, and how to best use my skills to be an indispensable member of a team.

2.    Why are you interested in this position? (Answer should be 100-250 words)

I am interested in this position because it utilizes the skills I am most confident in.  I have always been interested in a career where I could help people and truly make a difference.  After taking the EMT course in 2010, I spent time working and volunteering both in emergency response and in other areas.  I realized strengths within my skillset that I am efficient in such as _______________ and ____________.  I realized that while I do enjoy a job where every day is different, I also enjoy the ability to spend my day in a familiar environment.  I have developed exceptional organizational skills and have an above average understanding and competence in(?) computers. 

Post # 7
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: January 1993

@soon2bhis: maybe saying you’ve worked on computers daily for x years and are experienced in use of the Microsoft Office Suite or whatever programs you are very familar with.

 

What a nutpot!

Post # 8
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Busy Beekeeper
  • Wedding: October 2011

What position is this for ? 

Post # 10
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: January 1993

@soon2bhis: ok, then maybe ability to think fast and stay calm and guide others through stressful situations. 

Post # 11
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Busy Beekeeper
  • Wedding: October 2011

Ahh okay ! I was like is she doing EMT or desk work! Its great that you have lots experience in the medical acutal side as well as the computer side.Have you looked around at Emergency service associations and other job ads to pick up the lingo and the skills they are looking for to essentially advertise yourself using those attributes?

I have been looking into being a dispatcher as well with my background but I hear its a very stressful and intense job (depending on where you are dispatching for) – are you up for it? lol

Post # 12
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Buzzing bee

@soon2bhis: I am a results oriented customer service professional that truly enjoys working with people. I have five years of expertise working in customer service and I have an earned a reputation for success in any endeavor I encounter. My leadership abilities and excellent communication skills have assisted me with success in various industries. I am organized, thorough, and I can multi task to accommodate a demanding schedule.

Post # 13
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: September 2012

I can’t take 5 minutes from my Saturday, but I can give them to you from Sunday. HAHA.

I think you have a really good starting point.  What I learnt from writing Job Apps (and I have done a few trying to break into emergency services), is to be specific.

For instance, you say that you have developed clear and effective verbal and written communication skills.  How have you done this?  What specific skills do you have?  Have you done any formal or informal training?  How in your work life have you applied these skills?  What results did you acheive?

How have you utilised your ability to prioritise.  How has using a calm demeanor aided you in delivering customer service?  How has your EMT training helped you in regards to working under high pressure situations, and dealing with rapidly changing environments?

Here positions are very competitive.  They score each application in a competitive cull process, and the applicants with the highest scores go through to interview,  You get high scores through detail.  As an example, my last application (when I got this job, yay) had 7 questions in its claim for position selection criteria, and my application was 8 pages long.  I also got told by the HR manager here to be detailed, he was once very highly qualified for a position, but didn’t go into enough detail and didn’t even get a look in.

Also, I always get really good comments on my application, because everything is neatly laid out, all bullet points line up perfectly and I aim to get my presentation spot on. 1. So it looks professional and 2. So it is easy to follow and understand.

Now I don’t know if this application requries you to be THAT extreme.  But I do think you need to think about expanding your answers with examples and highlights from your career.

Good luck lovely.

XXOO

Post # 15
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Helper bee

The only thing I found is that instead of saying “and realized strengths that I had previously been unaware of.  I realized that while I do enjoy a job where every day is different, I also enjoy the ability to spend my day in a familiar environment.”

 

You should say “and realized strengths that I had previously been unaware of.  I found that while I do enjoy a job where every day is different, I also enjoy the ability to spend my day in a familiar environment.”

 

-It’s a very minor thing, but to me personally, I hate using the same word to describe something back-to-back. The rest of it sounds really well done! (Other posters are correct in their recommendations). Good luck! Smile

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