(Closed) Could you proofread my invite and rsvp wording pretty please?

posted 6 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

Are you just looking for feed back as far as typos?

Post # 4
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: June 2012

You misspelled families πŸ™‚

Post # 7
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: September 2011

These are the changes I would make! πŸ™‚ 

 

This is true love, you think this happens everyday?

 

Together with their familes,

her

and

him

invite you to join them in celebrating their marriage!

Saturday, September date, 2012

At four o’ clock in the afternoon.

venue

Wallace, Michigan

 

Dinner, drinks, and awkward but enthusiastic dancing to follow.

 

_______________________________________________________________

 

Please respond by August 15.

 

M_______________

 

Accepts.  Will be there with bells on!

Accepts.  Will be there, unsure about the bells.

Declines.  Heard there may be people with bells.

 

____ of ____ will be attending

Post # 8
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

It reads OK to me. Can you do a mock up of what it’ll actually look like on Word? There are SO many beautiful examples of invites on here that can help with wording if you’re having any doubts. Just click on the DIY section and there are millions of them!

Post # 10
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Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2012

If you’re going to spell out “4 o’clock in the afternoon” I’d probably do “Saturday, the 15th of September, two thousand twelve” personally.

Post # 11
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

Yeah just the word families, I would make it o’clock, and Wallace, Michigan. I would also change the responses to Accepts, instead of Accepts.

Post # 12
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: September 2011

@lunathea:  Haha, it’s cool! I’m an editor, and I managed to miss that families was spelled wrong! :o)

Post # 15
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2011

Agree on the matching of “four o’clock in the afternoon” with “Saturday, the first of September, two thousand twelve”.  Also, no periods (currently after afternoon, follow, 15, bells)

Post # 16
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: February 2013

I would change “invite you to join them in celebrating their marriage!” to “invite you to join in celebrating their marriage!”. Also, 2012 should be spelled out (“two thousand twelve”), as should the rest of the date & time (“four o’clock”, with an apostrophe).

Also also, families is misspelled (missing the second “I”).

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