(Closed) Critique my first invitation mock up!

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: September 2011

That’s so adorable! I think maybe I would pick just three fonts to make it blend a bit better. So like where you have two script fonts, just pick one. I think you can really preserve the quirky/vintage vibe and make it a bit more uniform :). 

Post # 4
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: June 2012

Looks good. I agree about sticking to a few fonts, and I would limit it to 2-3 colors as well. ๐Ÿ™‚

Post # 5
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Busy Beekeeper
  • Wedding: October 2011

Super cute! You are very talented! It starts off great, but it gets hard to read towards the end. Maybe just s font thickness change ?

Post # 6
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Bumble bee

It looks so cute, and going along with the PPs, cut the fonts down, you can still make them look different by using different colors, sizes, etc

Post # 7
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: March 2012

Cute ๐Ÿ™‚ As PPs said, I’d use fewer fonts.

Post # 8
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Helper bee

I definitely like the idea and agree with PPs… I also think maybe adding a border? That was my first thought to sort of solidify and wrangle all the different things going on. THen I clicked on the link and saw the Etsy ones had a border, too…

Such a great idea!! ๐Ÿ™‚

Post # 9
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

You spelled immediately wrong and I think the date is a little hard to read, but it looks very similar to the original.

Post # 11
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: February 2011

I think you’re mixing way too many fonts, colours and styles. The thick wavy lines and the pink arrows look too chunky compared with some of the more delicate elements, and the date font is way more ornate than anything else and seems out of place.

The Etsy invites are eclectic while still keeping reasonably clean lines, using bright colours well tempered by a dark neutral one, and scaling every element so it complements the others instead of a few things being overwhelming while others get lost.

You’ve made a good start, but I’d use more distinct colours and try for a bit more cohesion and even spacing in your layout.

Post # 13
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: January 2012

@Stassney: I still think there are too many fonts on the 2nd draft. I’m really not crazy about the smallest font towards the bottom. It looks choppy. In fact so does “Sunday”. I’d use the same font from the top “The fairy tale…”. Also, the teal, pink & blue doesn’t look fantastic with the green scrolls (I would change the leaves to black).

One last thing, take a quick look at the resolution: Maybe it’s cause your photo is a compressed jpeg but the pixels around the text really aren’t helping at all.

Post # 15
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: January 2012

Definately switch out the pink then & try saving the invite as a PNG. They’re higher resolution so they might solve your font problem. When I did my invites I tried to keep my fonts as large as possible cause old people complain all the time. Maybe boldening them or putting them in all caps might make a difference but I think you’re going to have to up the size if the picture can’t be saved in a better quality.

Regardless though, invitations in this kind of style look their best when the mix-&-matched boxes & clipart flow. You’ve got scrolls, arrows, flowers, hearts, lightning bolts, aswell as sparkly writing, cursive and type-writter fonts in all types of sizes, caps & boldness.  The majority of the invite is justified but the two boxes at the bottom are centered (which looks off) and the scroll is overlapping onto them.

You need to think of what feel you want to convey with these invites before you rework them cause right now it looks like you grabbed everything that caught your eye but they don’t really work together.

Post # 16
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2012

It’s just my opinion, but I think it’s a little too busy.  Whitespace is an important design element, too.  I don’t really care for the one on Etsy, either.

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