(Closed) Critique my invitation wording, please!

posted 3 years ago in Paper
Post # 2
891 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2013


Laurenplusalex:  I think it is supposed to say “invite you to share in the joy of the marriage of”

Post # 3
1237 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: August 2014

It looks good to me. I might change the “in the joy of the marriage of” part (there are a lot of prepositions there) to:

“joyously invite you to celebrate the marriage of their children,”

amd I would do a big fancy ampersand between your parents’ names instead of “And”

Post # 4
2786 posts
Sugar bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

I would say “along with Hisparents”. Also, depending on how formal this is I would update how you state the date and time to:

Saturday, the twenty-fifth of April

two thousand fifteen

at 4 o’clock in the evening (or you could say afternoon)

Post # 5
2034 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: October 2014

I always liked:

“Mr and Mrs Yourparents

invite you to celebrate the marriage of their daughter


To Hisname

Son of Mr and Mrs Hisparents

on blah blah blah…”

Post # 6
497 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: November 2015

Laurenplusalex:  If it was my invites, I’d take out the ‘children’ bit. But I do have a bee in my bonnet about being young 😛

  • This reply was modified 3 years, 1 month ago by  RhianfaHW.
Post # 8
1407 posts
Bumble bee

Shouldn’t it be









is usually for “mr. and mrs. bridesparents blahblah the marriage of their daughter Bridename to groomname.”

Post # 9
1407 posts
Bumble bee

RhianfaHW:  Yes.. “offspring” is much more accurate. lol


you can also cut out children maybe?  just “to share in thieir joy at the marriage of myname and hisname” (i agree that sentence should be rephrased). not sure if that makes sense. 

Post # 10
430 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: October 2014

Wording is fine, but for another example, mine will say:

MR and Mrs myparents

invite you to celebrate the wedding of

their daughter

Firstname Middle


Fristname Middle

son of Mr and Mrs his parents

Friday, the tenth of October

two thousand fourteen

at four thirty in the afternoon

Place here

Reception to follow.

Post # 11
337 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: March 2014

SimplyEuphoric:  bbbria:  But she specifically said she wants BOTH parents as hosts.  The 

“MR and Mrs Brides parents invite you to celebrate the wedding of their daughter

BrideFirstname Middle to GroomFristname Middle

son of Mr and Mrs Grooms parents” 

wording predominately suggests a traditional wedding where the BRIDES parents are hosting, and the groom are just being mentioned. 

Who is doing the “inviting” on the invitation says a lot about who the hosts are.  

OP: I think your orignial style, maybe with the ““joyously invite you to celebrate the marriage of their children,” suggestion would be great.  And you’re still their children no matter how old you are.  And if you’re old enough that it’s an issue, maybe it should be from you and your FI.<br /><br />

“Together with their partents,

Mr & Mrs. Brides Parents and Mr. & Mrs. Grooms Parents

BridesFirst Last and GroomsFirst Last

cordially invite you to celebrate their marriage.”

Or something.  That way it’s you two, AND both your parents, and no one is children.


Just another idea. 🙂


Also rosecut:  is correct– you’d ONLY use the “TO” between the bride and groom in the “traditional wording” discussed above.  Otherwise it’s generally “AND” 🙂

Post # 15
1918 posts
Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

For the date and time you should either write it out completely or not.

So either write:

Saturday, April 25, 2015 (writing the 25th is not correct)

4:00 p.m.


Or write:

Saturday, the twenty-fifth of April

two thousand fifteen

four o’clock in the afternoon


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