(Closed) critique my invite, please!

posted 6 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: September 2012

Typically the invitation is written in the third person, so It should be “Together with their parents” and “as they are united in marriage.” The word together is redundant because united already means together. You don’t need “in the afternoon” because no one will mistake it for 2am, but if you want to keep it neither the ‘o’, nor the ‘a’ on that line need to be capitalized.

 

Post # 4
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: November 2014

I personally like the personal touch of using “we” and “us” versus the third person.

I really like it, but there is something about that fat purple font that rubs me the wrong way. Maybe if it wasn’t so fat, or so purple lol

Post # 5
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

love it

Post # 6
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Sugar Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2013

Love! I agree that the wording is redundant, but I like your use of “we” versus third person.

Post # 7
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: April 2012

I would also write out Saturday, the third of November if you’re going to write two o’clock in the afternoon.

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