(Closed) Does my invitation wording look good? Suggestions appreciated!

posted 8 years ago in Paper
Post # 4
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

It looks great to me!

Post # 6
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: April 2011

I think it’s a great choice of words! Since your parents are paying for most, it’s good that you listed them first!

Post # 7
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

looks good!

do fi and his mom have the same last name? if so, i would just put his first and middle.

Post # 8
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: January 1991

Looks fine to me! I’m probably going to use a similar fomat. It will have both sets of parents names because my fiance’s parents are catering and my parents are paying for everything else. That being said, my parents will be listed first, but I still want his parents on the invitation.

Looks good 🙂

Post # 10
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: January 1991

Are you talking about this phrase: “This day I will marry my best friend, the one I laugh with, live for, love”?

It’s cute, but it doesn’t match the other wording. It starts off with you being the “speaker”. Then it switches to an anonymous speaker, announcing your parents AND yourself (when you were already speaking…). I don’t think it goes. Sorry it’s hard for me to explain, I don’t really understand parts of speech like 1st, 2nd, 3rd, person. But do you get what I’m saying?

Post # 11
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Buzzing bee

I would change it to just “the marriage of their children” not the “the marriage uniting their children”.  And I would keep the same format for your name and your fiance’s.  Either full names for both or first and middle for both.  I think in this case you should do full names for both since your name is separated from your parents.  Also… just say “Reception Immediately Following” and cut the word ceremony.

Also… I agree that the saying above the invitation isn’t really appropriate since it changes the speaker.  Also, you have very formal invitation format so I don’t think that quote matches the tone.

Post # 12
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

i didn’t even notice the phrase above. i agree with @kperry3:

i would change the wording to:
“invite you to share in their joy as their children unite in marriage”

Post # 14
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: March 2011

Does you Fiance want his late father mentioned? 

Post # 15
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Worker bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

Looks great- I love it!

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