(Closed) Does this sound Right?? For our outdoor wedding

posted 8 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Bumble bee

To me it reads a little choppy. I think you should start a new line with “at the celebration of their love and marriage”.

And maybe to make that other line longer for better flow you could use “request the pleasure of your company”

For the date we wrote ours out like, on Saturday the twenty-first of August, but ours were very formal/traditional.

Post # 5
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

if you are at a church, isn’t it “honour of your presence”?

Post # 7
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

The church line is “request the honour of your presence”. “Pleasure of your company” would be perfect for your situation :).

Post # 8
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Honey Beekeeper
  • Wedding: July 2010

I’d take out the word love – I just dont think it flows right.  I do agree though that saying “Pleasure of your company” would work well for your situation.

As for the date, it depends on the formality of your event/invitations.  More formal would be writing it out as Jacqi said; less formal, I’d just write August 21st, 2010.

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