(Closed) Editing Eyes, pleas

posted 4 years ago in Paper
Post # 2
1282 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2012

wabanzi:  under ‘cocktail hour’ on the first page, should say 4:45 pm

on the last page, there are too many ‘O’s in Groom (second to last line). In the line above it, there is a missing ‘d’ in grandparents

It looks great!

Post # 3
1282 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: November 2012

I don’t think putting ‘friend’ is wrong. You could put ‘friend of couple’ or ‘friend of groom/bride’, or ‘friend of bride and groom’ if you wanted to specify further. 

I don’t know if you need to put the start time, since I assume everyone will know when it should start, as they will only get the program once they arrive at the ceremony. If you wanted to, I think it would fit in nicely on the first page, where you have listed the date and location. 

Post # 4
8681 posts
Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2012

I only see a few tiny things.

Page 1 I would list the times in the same format, “4:45 to 6pm” versus “6pm-7:30pm”

The last line in the crane text looks like it might have an extra space before the Y.

Technically I think handfasting is one word? On that page you have the F capitalized in the title.

Otherwise I think they look good!

Edit: “grandparents” and “groom” are mispelled on the last page.

  • This reply was modified 4 years, 5 months ago by  Westwood.
Post # 7
9181 posts
Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2013 - Rocky Mountains USA

wabanzi:  Not sure if any of these have been said already.  

On the first page, you have both “4:45 to 6:00″ and “6:00 – 7:30″ – you should choose one or the other (“to” or the hypen).

I wouldn’t put “Photo booth opens 9-11:30″ or whatever… just say photobooth.  It’s not technically “opening” that whole time.

The crane thing is super cute, but the last line “You may count them, if you like” just struck me as awkward.  Um thanks for allowing me to count them?  Ya know what I mean, lol?

Misspellings on the last page (underlined in red).

And yes, I would put “Ceremony xx – xx” on the first page as well, and I think “friend” is great for the wedding party.

These are really really cute!  The formatting and design are great.

Post # 8
773 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2014 - Gold Hill Gardens

Love it – our program is shaping up similarly. It’ll be a booklet (we’re calling it a Field Guide), and we’re going to have origami butterflies and a handfasting as part of the ceremony. As far as the “counting” the cranes goes, perhaps turn it into a “challenge” rather than making it sound like you’re giving them permission . . . something like “Can you find all 1000 cranes?” 

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