(Closed) * Finished writing my VOWS! Tell me what you think please! *

posted 5 years ago in Ceremony
  • poll: What do you think about my vows?
    Way too long. Cut out another minutes worth - Please give advice on what you'd cut out : (18 votes)
    33 %
    A few things need tweaking, but overall good & heartfelt : (9 votes)
    17 %
    Its perfect! (just fix grammar) If ppl love you they'll listen for 2 mins. Plus my FI will love it! : (24 votes)
    44 %
    Don't like them at all. And please tell me why. : (3 votes)
    6 %
  • Post # 3
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    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: August 2013

    This is so sweet! I’m writing my own vows too, but I personally am gonig to keep mine a littler shorter– only because I KNOW I’m going to get emotional, and I’m not even going to try to cry through a long reading of vows! Nobody will be able to understand me after a while and it would be a struggle to finish… Lol!

    Post # 4
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    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: June 2014

    I think those are fantastic vows!  Some humor, sweetness and actual promises.  I hate vows that are just an extended “I love you” and no actual VOWS.  I don’t think it’s too long, but here’s a suggestion – watch a movie that makes you sob hysterically.  Everyone has one.  Read the vows while crying.  If you can get through them while crying and it doesn’t take forever and day, you’re good!

    Post # 6
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: October 2013

    I love it. To hell if it is long. People are coming to watch you and your fiance commit your lives to each other. There may be a big party later but THIS is the part that matters. If this is how you feel, this is absolutely what you should say. I’d just warn your Fiance that yours are a little long so he doesn’t just go “@HappinessIsInDaisies:…you’re pretty neat. I love you and promise always to.” and leave it at that. πŸ™‚

    Post # 7
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: June 2013

    They are perfect πŸ™‚

     

    Very sweet

    Post # 8
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    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: June 2013

    I think they are very sweet and pretty. I would personally try to shorten some of the stuff that isn’t actual vows if you can, but that’s just me. I think vows should be just that.

    Post # 9
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    495 posts
    Helper bee

    I am an editor, so I thought I’d offer you a little bit of grammatical/flow advice. Please don’t take this as a critique of your content or feelings! I just think you could tighten it up IF you want:

    . [Name], today, I feel like the luckiest girl in the world, standing next to someone whom I admire, endlessly trust, and love with all that I am.

    2. In you, I found someone (change to “a partner” or “a husband” or something more specific) who not only enjoys all my silliness and dorkiness, but revels in it. I cherish our silly antics and your sense of adventure, and how your unconditional support inspires me to be myself. I love when we’re driving down hidden roads and getting lost, and when we find or finding mountainsides that I insist we can climb in two minutes, but we’re still going after that end up taking two hours and both nearly lose a limb. nearly costing us both our limbs… I love how you listen to me sing in the car to songs I only know half the words to, o.. and how you do all this these things knowing that we started our journey two hours late, when because I said I’d be ready in ten minutes.

    3. You are so genuine, such a genuine person and I ardently love the light and kindness in your soul. I love the way you make me smile, and I adore the way you look at me. , when I step outside after getting ready or when you turn to look at me in the mornings and i It’s like you‘re seeing me for the first time every time.

    4. [Name], today I give you my mind, my body, and my soul. I promise to always remember to live our lives and to remember to pause, laugh and dance with you in the middle of the street. I promise to embrace the journey, not just rather than blindly seeking the destination. And I promise to always treasure that moment before you break into laughter and or the way you light up with with your love for me. 

    Last year, when my grandfather was sick, you told me if you had everything he did had — a long life with all the people who loved you, your wife, your children and your grandchildren, standing around surrounding you and laughing with you — that that sounded like a pretty good life. That is the life that I promise to strive to create that life for us, and I promise to fight for that love, no matter what comes our way. I promise to encourage you, empower you and help you shine and follow your dreams. I promise to always be your smile and your laughter. I am so, so proud of the man you have become, and I cannot wait to start our family, grow old together, and hold your hand for the rest of my life. [Full Name], I promise not to merely exist with you, but to live my life with you. I will love you forever – Iin this life and the next.


    Obviously, you don’t have to take any of my suggestions, and the punctuation stuff is just how I’d treat a professional writer, but there you go. I wanted to compliment you on your heartfelt and romantic vows, too!

    Post # 10
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    279 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: September 2013

    I Love this! so genuine and shows both personalities.

    Post # 11
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    Sugar bee
    • Wedding: October 2010

    @HappinessIsInDaisies:  Honestly?  Your “vows” are pretty much all about you.

     

    Post # 12
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    Helper bee
    • Wedding: August 2013

    @Zhabeego: Really ? Because the majority of what I read is her promising to the things that make him happy, what she admires about him, and how he makes her feel. 

    Post # 13
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: April 2013

    @jmarvellous:  that was nice you to edit the vows for op. 

     

    @HappinessIsInDaisies:  I think your Vows are nice. I feel like I know more about you than him after reading them Though. Maybe talk about  him more.

     

    Post # 14
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    Sugar bee
    • Wedding: October 2010

    @charmedbee:  Yeah, really.  If I were on the Groom’s side (or maybe even the Bride’s) I would think she was focusing mainly on herself.  There are only a few sentences that talk exclusively about the Groom and not just about how much he loves her. 

    I’ll be honest, I’m not a fan of people writing their own “vows” because they really tend to not actually be vows so much as intimate declarations of love that just make the guests squirm.  However, if you’re going to do them, then I think they should be actual vows and focused far more on your Fiance and your union than on yourself. 

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