(Closed) Grammar Police! I need your help

posted 6 years ago in DIY
Post # 3
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5668 posts
Bee Keeper

“Another,” no “s.”

Post # 4
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: August 2012

If you really want to be sticky about grammar, your passage should read as follows:

These are the hands that, even wrinkled with age,

will still be reaching for one another’s;

Still giving the same unspoken tenderness with just a touch.

At first I thought there was no need for the ‘S’ on ANOTHERS but after reading it again, ‘even wrinkled with age’ is an unnecessary clause that defines hands.  Hands is plural, so another needs to be plural also.  You need to frame it with commas because the sentence can work with or without it. 

If you remove the clause then “one anothers” is still correct BUT “anothers” defines possession so there needs to be an apostrophe. 

The semi colan is optional in my opinion.  It makes sense (links two common subject sentences together) but looks kinda funny.  Might be more esthestically pleasing carved with a period.

Post # 5
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: August 2013

I agree with Aure in that it should be “another” because the subjects are the hands themselves, not the people who are reaching for the other’s hand.

And I agree with adding the commas that Nicoso added.

Post # 6
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: September 2010

Hm. I agree with @Aure that it should just be “another.” No “s.” Here’s my take:

These are the hands that, even wrinkled with age,

Will still be reaching for one another,

Still giving the same unspoken tenderness with just a touch


I say “another” because there are two hands that are reaching for one another. I added the commas in the first line as @Nicoso suggested, but I changed the semicolon in the second line to a comma (“still giving . . . ” isn’t an independent clause, and it looks weird to me following a semicolon).

 

Post # 7
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Bee Keeper

Good catch on the commas, I paused automatically reading through it and didn’t realize they were missing!

There doesn’t need to be an “s” or an “‘s” because there is no posession, the hands are the subject, as PPs mentioned.

Post # 8
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Honey bee

These are the hands that, even wrinkled with age,
will still be reaching for one another,
still giving the same unspoken tenderness with just a touch.



Semicolons separate 2 independent clause. “Still giving the same unspoken tenderness with just a touch” is dependent clause.

Post # 9
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Honey bee

I believe an em-dash is also possible before the word “still.”

Post # 10
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Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: June 2011

I agree there should be no S after “one another” because you already have a plural in the previous line with the hands. The easy way to tell its not right with the S is to read the sentence and omit the middle phrase

 These are the hands that … will still be reaching for one anothers

 THese are the hands that… will still be reaching for one another.

Post # 11
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Sugar bee
  • Wedding: September 2011

Or you could skip the punctuation and call it a poem?

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