(Closed) Help me Proofread?

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
544 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

The only change I’d make is to take out the period after “Reception to immediately follow.”

Your suite looks fantastic.

Post # 4
1227 posts
Bumble bee
  • Wedding: October 2011

In the website card, I would put a comma in the first sentence (“As a courtesy to our guests, we have created…”

In the invitation itself, I’d change the last sentence to read “Reception to follow immediately.” The way you have it now, you’re splitting the infinitive “to follow” with the word immediately, and old-school grammar says do not split your infinitives.

Also, I have a little trouble reading the script font. It’s really pretty, but I have some eyesight issues, so for me it’s a little difficult to read. Might look different when printed out, though, as opposed to on a computer screen!!

Post # 5
6394 posts
Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: September 2011

Info card: It’s not a grammar thing, but I would drop the “As a courtesy for our guests” line because it makes it sound like you’re doing them a huge favor just by creating a website. I think it would read better if you said: “We have created a wedding website to keep you informed. The site…”

Invite: I think “half past five” sounds more formal.

Everything else looks good!

Post # 7
334 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: May 2012

I like the script except when used for the date and venue name in the invitaition.  It looks too compressed at that size and doesn’t match well with the larger size used for the names.

Beautiful suite though!

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