(Closed) Help with personal vows!

posted 4 years ago in Ceremony
Post # 2
4940 posts
Honey bee
  • Wedding: June 2014

carriebee9:   I’d agree they are a bit long.  Can you pick out perhaps one or two very personal aspects?  The general parts are wonderful  I love this section  “I love how big your heart is, and how hard you try to bring out the best in me, and everyone around you. You understand me better than I understand myself. Thank you for loving me for who I am, for always being by my side, and for teaching me what love is really about. You make everyday more exciting than the last, and I look forward to waking up next to you each morning to see what new adventure awaits us. ”  

That’s really lovely.   The repeated very personal, day to day stuff (laundry) isn’t going to be captivating to much of the audience, I wouldn’t think.  It waters down the really beautiful wording, in my opinion.

Post # 3
746 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: July 2014

I really like the vows but I think they are too long for a ceremony.  I’m writing my vows as well.  I’m getting married July 5th. I found when I wrote everything down, like you, it was just too long.  After giving it some thought, I got a yellow highlighter.  I approched my vows as if I were a student taking notes.  What were the most important sentences I HAD to include.  It’s not the most romantic way to edit vows but for practical purposes it worked.

I’m going to PM you with my editing suggestions. 

My “editing” suggestions –

Post # 4
901 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: November 2014 - 11/15/14-Vineyard

I really love them! When you say them out loud its really not long. It just looks long. Stick with them! 

Post # 5
12 posts

I actually really love them as is! They sound great, personal, and with a touch of humor. I personally wouldn’t think they were too long if I were attending your wedding. It’s your day! Make your vows as long as you want! It’s your chance to make all these sweet promises to your husband, don’t cut them down because you feel you’re expected to!

Post # 7
234 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: Aug 30th, 2014

I would suggest you use parts as a speech/toast at the reception, if you’re doing that. I think the parts that are more history/feelings instead of actual vows would make a really great speech on their own!

Post # 8
214 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: October 2014

I say keep it all. They are lovely, and it’s not about what your guests find interesting. It’s about what you want to say to your husband on such an important day. Keep every word!

Post # 9
97 posts
Worker bee
  • Wedding: August 2014

I think it’s lovely and sweet just as is…I would not change it.  It’s really not that long.

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