Post # 1
Right then Bees….I need your help!
We are having a vintage Alice in Wonderland themed wedding and we would love a poem or rhyme for our invites (like the Mad Hatter and his rhymes!)
Anyone have any ideas? I have googled it but not had much luck!
I have written this so far but it’s rubbish:
There’s a date, a date, a very important date!
It’s the Wedding of ……(our names here)
Oh My! What a cause to celebrate!
Sunday (date here) is our special day
So please do a dance to keep the rain away!
The festivities begin at 2’ O Clock
At ….(venue name)
So please wear your best frock.
Sooo, Bees, please help me! Surely someone out there is good at this sort of thing!???!!!
Post # 3
Morning Mister Chatterbox
I’d love to stop and chatter
But in ______short months
I must meet with the Mad HatterI
Sunday the _____of ____ is the date
For the marriage of _____and _______
What a cause to celebrate!
The festivities begin at two o’clock
Don’t be late for this very important date!
Post # 4
Here’s the first thing to come to mind, sorry if it sounds bad:
A date, a date, please do not be late!
The wedding of _____ and _____ is near
Two people that we hold so dear.
Sunday (date) is coming fast
At 2 O’Clock, not a minute past!
Oh me, oh my! How time does fly!
The wedding’s at (venue), please do stop by
The marriage will not wait!
The first and last line rhyme even though they aren’t by each other.
Post # 5
Here’s what I came up with:
Oh my I’m thrilled
I can not wait
The date is set to celebrate
And who my dear should we all cheer?
Why ____ & ____ it’s all quite clear
On the 10th of April 2011 @ (venue)
The place is heaven
Festivities begin at 2
we want to share this day with you
Post # 6
oh I’m having an alice themed wedding too so let me know what you end up doing for the invites.
Post # 7
Love them! Thank you Bees!!!! We have a talented bunch on here don’t we!?!
Now I just have to choose which one to use!!!!!!!
@Katsupgirl: Message me if you want to share ideas – I have loads of docs with ideas!
Post # 8
here’s one i found on google that i editted a little to fit yours…
The mad hatter and the queen of heart.
Would like to invite you to take part,
in the marriage between __________& __________
(date here) , when the clock strikes 2,
at the (venue), no sooner or later or falling through.
We will all gather afterwards to celebrate
check with the white rabbit & don’t be late!
We hope you r.s.v.p. that you can attend,
to share in a beginning that will never end!
Post # 9
I can’t come up with anything, but would like to say this is a really great idea and I’m sure your guests will appreciate your originality no matter which you pick!
It might help if you try to keep the candence (? not sure if thats the right word) the same or similar on each line.
like instead of saying
“quarter pound of beef, lettuce, sesame-seed bun and cheddar cheese
It’s always bound to please”
it’d be like
“beef, lettuce, cheddar cheese
Grab the snack that’s bound to please”
(Sorry for the weird burger analogy, I just reworked some copy for a client…)
By and large, when people read poetry, if they know it rhymes they will try and fit it all into the structure of the first line or two (like twinkle, twinkle little star or something like that) so if your first line has 15 syllables and your second line has 3, or if your first two have 5 and your next two have 11, it will throw people off and lose a little bit of its poemy goodness. I liked the one you wrote–but it sounds like you didn’t, and this might be why.