(Closed) Invitation Wording :-/

posted 6 years ago in Ceremony
  • poll: How do I word the invitation?
    Wording example #1 : (3 votes)
    8 %
    Wording example #2 : (5 votes)
    13 %
    Saturday, the sixteenth of June : (9 votes)
    24 %
    Saturday, the 16th of June : (2 votes)
    5 %
    Include the year : (10 votes)
    26 %
    Don't include the year : (0 votes)
    Include the zip code : (4 votes)
    11 %
    Don't include the zip code : (5 votes)
    13 %
  • Post # 3
    Member
    907 posts
    Busy bee
    • Wedding: October 2012

    I would include the zip code bc ppl hold on to the invite for directions into the GPS.  Also i like the changes she made. Its a toss up on the date for me. If its more formal use the written out version vs #s.

    Post # 4
    Member
    3886 posts
    Honey bee
    • Wedding: September 2011

    Adding the “we” to make “we invite you” is bad grammar. Try reading it without the parents’ line inserted: Janie and Johnny invite you…. As opposed to Janie and Johnny we invite you. Also it should be “with their parents” instead of “with our parents.”

    The other details are really just cosmetic but this one’s a biggie.

    Post # 6
    Member
    11352 posts
    Sugar Beekeeper
    • Wedding: May 2009

    You’re getting there.  You need to stay in the same “person” throughout the invitation, so you are correct in your assessment that you cannot switch back and forth between “our” and “their.”

    Regarding your question about the date, if you want your invitations to be formal, then the date should appear in this manner:

    Saturday, the Eighth of September

    Two Thousand Twelve 

    Name of Venue Here

    City, State

    (You do not need the zipcode)

     

     

    Post # 8
    Member
    11352 posts
    Sugar Beekeeper
    • Wedding: May 2009

    Nope! You’re definitely NOT crazy, lol! 🙂

    Before I take a stab at this, I should offer the disclaimer that, although I had a very formal, very proper, traditional invitation, I am by NO means an authority on how yours should read.  Given what you would like to do, I would consider the following: 

    Your love and friendship

    Have helped them

    Become who they are.

    Together with their parents,

    Minnie and Mickey

    Invite you to share in their joy,

    And support their love,,As they exchange vows and celebrate their marriage

    DAY

    YEAR

    VENUE

    NOTE:  My understanding is that there is very little punctuation used on formal invitations (usually just commas separating the day and the date and the city and the state, but nothing else.) However, the way yours is written, I think it almost needs the additional punctuation.  I absolutely yield my recommendation to someone who is certain of how to punctuate this.  However, this is my best guess from a grammar perspective.

    Post # 9
    Member
    1026 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2012

    I would stick with the they/their tense for the whole thing.  Its more formal/traditional and flows better throughout.

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