(Closed) Invitation wording help CRISIS NEED HELP ASAP!

posted 9 years ago in Etiquette
Post # 4
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813 posts
Busy bee
  • Wedding: May 2018

I can’t read any of the copy you original posted because its all HTML. Can you retype it?

Post # 5
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Worker bee
  • Wedding: October 2009

I’m sorry, but I don’t think I see any problems with what you wrote.  If its different from your first post (where there’s only HTML code) then maybe there is a problem.  Can you repost what was done at the printers?

Post # 6
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Buzzing bee
  • Wedding: November 2008

I am a copy editor (I fix grammar all day…) and this looks fine to me. Technically, there should probably be commas after "James Doe" and after "parents" but that would really be important for comprehension only if it were all written out as sentences. The line breaks make your meaning perfectly clear. The wording sounds great. There’s no crisis I can see! Good luck.

Post # 8
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203 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: April 2018

I’m a writer and I vote for  the original.  It flows much better.I thought your original was drastically different from the one your friend suggested and when I went to check I realized it was just the placing of the phrase made is so much easier to read. It has a better rhythm that way in my opinion. Good luck!

 

Post # 9
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398 posts
Helper bee
  • Wedding: February 2009

I’d have to say I like the original wording.  Sorry that you are having issues with the printer.  Hopefully they will send you a proof this time!

 

Good Luck!

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