(Closed) Invitation Wording- Help Please??

posted 8 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: July 2010

I think you could make the wording a bit more clear, but I really like the quote you have! If you just off-set it a bit, so it was obviously not part of the invite text, I think it’ll look really pretty.   I would change a few things about the actual inviting though

Just use your names, no “we” before them, and remove the word “wedding” from line 2 (it’s obvious). You could also think about moving the date down, after the actual inviting.  “Mr & Ms will be married in a private ceremony. You are joyfully invited…. on July 3 at 2pm”  Just a thought.

Post # 4
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: June 2010

I like the quote too!  I wonder if the wording “wedding celebration” doesn’t potentially imply that it’s the wedding itself that people are being invited to (where private = you and your 20 closest friends and family).  If you avoid this if you just dropped “wedding”, I think, so that it just said “You are joyfully invited to an informal outdoor celebration…”

Post # 6
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Helper bee
  • Wedding: June 2010

What if you DON’T put what they’re NOT invited to at the top and put what they ARE higher up, so you’d be leading with the lead & swapping it a bit like this:

                                      Poem

           You are joyfully invited to the wedding celebration of

                                  Name

                                        and

                                                Name

                   on the third of July, two thousand and ten

                          at two o’clock in the afternoon

                   following their private wedding ceremony

                                      Park Name

                                 Tarpon Spring, Florida

Casual Attire

   

oh — could considering losing the second “wedding” before celebration/// I’m not crazy about inviting guests to a marraige, I mean, a marriage is a relationship!         

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