(Closed) Invite wording – argh!

posted 8 years ago in Paper
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Bumble Beekeeper
  • Wedding: December 2010

I like it 🙂

Post # 4
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: July 2011

how bout “with joyful hearts you are invited….”  IMO, ending the first line with you just is off to me…

Post # 5
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Busy bee
  • Wedding: June 2011

I agree with the “with joyful hears you are invited…”

Post # 6
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: May 2011

I don’t think the “With Joyful Hearts you are invited” works either… WHO has joyful hearts? Plus in general you should try to avoid passive tense. What about

With Joyful Hearts

QuidditchQueen and QuiddithKing

invite you to celebrate their marriage

Of course that moves the fonts around which you may not want to do…

Post # 7
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Bumble bee
  • Wedding: July 2011

ok.. .how bout you are joyfully invited 

basically just replacing cordially with joyfully??

Post # 8
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Honey bee
  • Wedding: May 2011

i like mamahusky’s suggestion!

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