(Closed) Invite wording–Help/Suggestions

posted 6 years ago in Paper
Post # 4
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Busy bee

I think it’s perfectly cute! I might borrow some of the wording πŸ™‚

Post # 6
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Bumble Beekeeper

@trixiesrockets:  Sounds great. I can’t think of any way to improve it, it’s perfect as-is, good job!

Post # 7
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Bumble bee

Looks good to me! Although if you want me to, I can be picky about grammar and all that jazz but sounds like it will be lots of fun!

Post # 8
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Blushing bee
  • Wedding: May 2013

I think it’s adorable… but… the first line is not grammatically correct. Please join us for their love story…. it should be join us for our love story. You could also go with something like Please come celebrate our love story. 

Post # 9
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Buzzing Beekeeper
  • Wedding: August 2013 - Rocky Mountains USA

I agree that “join US for THEIR love story” makes no sense in terms of the pronouns. I’m also not quite sure what it means in general, you know?  How can you join people for their love story? Maybe to celebrate their love story? To add a new chapter to their love story? I like the rest of it though!

Since you asked for suggestions – we’re putting on ours, “Xxx and Xxx invite you to share in our joy as we unite in marriage.” Informal and sweet πŸ™‚

Post # 10
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Newbee
  • Wedding: August 2013

You could also even say “Please join us in celebrating our love story” ??

sounds great though!

Post # 11
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Busy bee

The grammar depends on the context. If the wedding invitations are being announced by the parents, for example, it would be correct to say “join us in celebrating their…”.

 

BUT if the invitations are coming from the bride and groom then you might want to change that! I can see how it looks familiar from other invites that are worded to imply that the parents are asking people to join the bride and groom in the party they are announcing for them.

Post # 15
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Busy bee

@trixiesrockets:  Good luck! Can’t really go wrong, it’s your style, your wedding and your loving intention!!!

Post # 16
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Buzzing bee

@trixiesrockets:  My suggestion:

Miss Trixie

and

Mr. Rockets

invite you to share their joy and celebrate their love

as they exchange vows and become husband and wife

June 7, 2013

6 o’clock in the evening

EVENT SPACE NAME

123 Main Street

Kentucky

Food, drink, and merriment to follow

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