(Closed) Invite wording – what do you think?

posted 7 years ago in Paper
Post # 3
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Bee Keeper
  • Wedding: April 2011

I like the wording… it’s really cute and not too stuffy but still formal

it does look a little weird with the “two thousand and eleven” on the lined by itself.

That’s really all though…

Post # 5
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Busy Beekeeper

I would take out the first “we” after with joyful hearts.

I also am not quite sure of the ‘our’ usage.  Should it be “their”?  (I really don’t know).

So it would read:  together with their parents

and: as they exchange marriage vows.

You could also omit the “on” before Friday.  And just have Friday, the fourtheeth of October.

And the year would not have ‘and’:  just:  Two Thousand Eleven

 

 

Post # 7
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Busy Beekeeper

@shimmerofheaven: I know what you mean!  I think ‘our’ makes it a little more information and third person makes it a little more formal.  It’s all about personal preference, in the end! 

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