(Closed) Is this too much for “How We Met” page of website? (SUPER LONG POST!)

posted 6 years ago in Waiting
  • poll: Is this too long? Should I cut it down?
    I didn't read it, it's way too long - chop chop! : (35 votes)
    76 %
    I read it, it's still too long - chop chop! : (9 votes)
    20 %
    I read it, it's great, keep it the way it is! : (0 votes)
    I didn't read it, but it's your story and if it you like it, keep it the way it is! : (2 votes)
    4 %
  • Post # 3
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    Helper bee
    • Wedding: November 1999

    I got about half way through, thought surely the end was near but it was already too long for me. So in my opinion…yes it’s reaaaaalllyy long and you lost me about half way through. I don’t think they need each play by play. I think it can definitely be shortened to get the story across while still be entertaining. But maybe that’s just me.

    Post # 4
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    1798 posts
    Buzzing bee
    • Wedding: August 2011

    It’s crazy long. Try to get it down to 2-4 paragraphs

    Post # 4
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    5993 posts
    Bee Keeper
    • Wedding: May 2010

    seeing how long it is – i didnt even finish the first paragraph

    Post # 6
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    9824 posts
    Buzzing Beekeeper

    Yeah, I would never read all that, sorry!

    Post # 7
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    Sugar bee
    • Wedding: November 2011

    I don’t think you need to be as descriptive with the details. Most people just want the jist of it. Yes it’s an important story to your life but most people are not going to read more than a paragraph or two. 

    Post # 8
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    Honey bee
    • Wedding: August 2013

    So I voted to chop it and that I had not read it. Then I felt bad and read it. Basically I think there are like 4ish (maybe more its hard to keep track?) events that led to you two getting together. I *think* the first event is you throwing that wine tasting and one of your friends saying Mr. Lace is no good. And it takes you like two paragraphs to get to that point. That could easily be like 3 sentences. And then simplify all of the other events into a couple sentences. I like the last paragraph where you list all of the things you have in common, but I would be very surprised if anyone got there. I’m not even really sure you need to have all of the events in there. I like hearing about your first kiss and you listening to Lady Gaga, but do you need to include the first half of that paragraph? Idk my thoughts are all over the place because it was so long I can’t really keep your story straight because its so long. And half of the comments in the paretheses are interesting and half I could care less about (as someone who does not know you, maybe your family would get more of the references, but I suspect his family would not care as much about them).

    ETA: I mean all of that in the best possible light. I hate writing and when people criticize what I write so I try to be nice when editing other people’s stuff. I just wanted to give you a possible direction to help you get it to a length people will read.

    Post # 10
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    14569 posts
    Honey Beekeeper
    • Wedding: June 2011

    WAY TOO long.  I wanted to at least read it, so I made it through, but there’s way too much fluff.  I feel like I would have enjoyed it more in a bulleted get to the point format.  I’d keep that for my own story or something and put something shorter on the website. 

    Post # 11
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    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: December 2012

    To be honest I just skimmed it once I scrolled down and saw how long it was. There is no way I’d read that much. I think 2-4 paragraphs is plenty. People don’t care so much about the play by play details. instead of a detailed paragraph about meeting at a party. You could sum that up with ‘after a night of casual flirting across the room at a mutual friends party, I came home to find Mr Lace had added me on Facebook.’

    Post # 12
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    1512 posts
    Bumble bee
    • Wedding: September 2013

    Sorry, but I only made it through a couple paragraphs. It’s far too long- keep it simple!

    Post # 13
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    248 posts
    Helper bee
    • Wedding: March 2010

    Actually, I have to say, I read the whole thing. Initially I scrolled down and was totally put off (and I *like* reading), but once I started I got into it.

    There’s a couple of typos so make sure you print it out in hard copy and get someone with a fresh eye to look over it.

    I’m kind of torn. On one hand, I think wedding websites are totally unneccesary and crazy, but on the other, if you’re going to have one why not make it worthwhile?

    Do you have photos you could ‘illustrate’ it with? That would break it up and make it more readible.

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